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out of here
ive had my times to think.
ive had plenty to drink.
and i've seen throught the lies.
i've tried everything i can think of.
im no longer in love.
i opened my eyes.
and now i want to die.
that river's where the memories lie.
its over flooded and passing me by.
i just want to get out of here.
i dont want to explode in tears.
take me to where i no longer fear.
i just want to get of here.
i dont want to explode in tears.
take me to where i no longer fear.
the reaxation and anticipation cease to continue.
the masks are see through.
ive never known truth.
heres the scars, your proof.
my apathetic diction!
time to sacrifice the christian!
you gave it a start!
now ill give it an end with a twist.
write it with the flood from my wrist!
i just want to get out of here.
i dont want to explode in tears.
take me to where i no longer fear.
i just want to get of here.
i dont want to explode in tears.
take me to where i no longer fear.
im not good enough?
im not good and tough?
we're just numbers and files.
NOT SO DIFFERENT!
im through living in here!
im through living in fear!
shattered remains explode in my tears.
JUST LET ME OUT OF HERE!!!!!!
ive had plenty to drink.
and i've seen throught the lies.
i've tried everything i can think of.
im no longer in love.
i opened my eyes.
and now i want to die.
that river's where the memories lie.
its over flooded and passing me by.
i just want to get out of here.
i dont want to explode in tears.
take me to where i no longer fear.
i just want to get of here.
i dont want to explode in tears.
take me to where i no longer fear.
the reaxation and anticipation cease to continue.
the masks are see through.
ive never known truth.
heres the scars, your proof.
my apathetic diction!
time to sacrifice the christian!
you gave it a start!
now ill give it an end with a twist.
write it with the flood from my wrist!
i just want to get out of here.
i dont want to explode in tears.
take me to where i no longer fear.
i just want to get of here.
i dont want to explode in tears.
take me to where i no longer fear.
im not good enough?
im not good and tough?
we're just numbers and files.
NOT SO DIFFERENT!
im through living in here!
im through living in fear!
shattered remains explode in my tears.
JUST LET ME OUT OF HERE!!!!!!
Published 13th Feb 2013
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16th Feb 2013 10:48am
a nice tragedy here. Like this. :)
Although I see that you can improve this piece if you had more rhymes and try not to be redundant. I love these lines right here...
"i just want to get out of here.
i dont want to explode in tears.
take me to where i no longer fear.
i just want to get of here.
i dont want to explode in tears.
take me to where i no longer fear. "
The way you emphasized the first three lines by repeating them is a good idea. I liked this in fact. Especailly "tkae me to where I no longer fear"... Nice. keep it up. ;)
~SML
Although I see that you can improve this piece if you had more rhymes and try not to be redundant. I love these lines right here...
"i just want to get out of here.
i dont want to explode in tears.
take me to where i no longer fear.
i just want to get of here.
i dont want to explode in tears.
take me to where i no longer fear. "
The way you emphasized the first three lines by repeating them is a good idea. I liked this in fact. Especailly "tkae me to where I no longer fear"... Nice. keep it up. ;)
~SML
