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Oh Empty Me
It must be one of those
good enough to fuck
not good enough to love kinda days
oh empty me
what shall I do with all this nothingness
would you like some? Hmmmmm would you???
yeah didn't think so
and I wouldn't recommend it
but its mine and I'll own it
I'll carry it and harbor it
fuck it I might even marry nothing
I should, since I sleep with it every night
the cruelest midnight is upon me
I do not care, I welcome it with open arms
and with a smile you could see from space
laughing as the darkness wraps itself around me
I'll sit here and watch the paint peel
while the starkness has its way with my mind
a hollow girl stuck in a dead world
oh how barren one can truly be
nothing is empty
I am nothing
therefor its
oh empty me
good enough to fuck
not good enough to love kinda days
oh empty me
what shall I do with all this nothingness
would you like some? Hmmmmm would you???
yeah didn't think so
and I wouldn't recommend it
but its mine and I'll own it
I'll carry it and harbor it
fuck it I might even marry nothing
I should, since I sleep with it every night
the cruelest midnight is upon me
I do not care, I welcome it with open arms
and with a smile you could see from space
laughing as the darkness wraps itself around me
I'll sit here and watch the paint peel
while the starkness has its way with my mind
a hollow girl stuck in a dead world
oh how barren one can truly be
nothing is empty
I am nothing
therefor its
oh empty me
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Re: Oh Empty Me
Nikkiemoe ,
Lot's here for the mind to process. at first, there seems to be an undertone of mocking or a few light digs being thrown at the narrator by the narrator, then gels into the strong matter of fact-'couldn't give a flying fuck' type voice that is prevalent in your writings.
there are other things in there though;
"would you like some? Hmmmmm would you???
yeah didn't think so"
fabulous
intriguing little poem you got here Lady.
great stuff.
Lot's here for the mind to process. at first, there seems to be an undertone of mocking or a few light digs being thrown at the narrator by the narrator, then gels into the strong matter of fact-'couldn't give a flying fuck' type voice that is prevalent in your writings.
there are other things in there though;
"would you like some? Hmmmmm would you???
yeah didn't think so"
fabulous
intriguing little poem you got here Lady.
great stuff.
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4th Feb 2013 10:27pm
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5th Feb 2013 6:52am
I agree with this, I had the same thoughts almost exactly as I read your poem. I felt as if your words were a part of my current situation.
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Anonymous
4th Feb 2013 11:01pm
The stark reality of this poem just
hangs there like a row of metal hangers....
Wow...you are good
Kitty
hangs there like a row of metal hangers....
Wow...you are good
Kitty
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4th Feb 2013 11:04pm
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4th Feb 2013 11:51pm
this is good you have the "why should i give the fuck" attitude that i harbour on bad days.
great write
marcus
great write
marcus
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Re: Oh Empty Me
5th Feb 2013 00:08am
I read the despair in this work and thought poor girl she realy ought to find a nice guy and give him a good seeing too! (If that's not being too crude) I hope not ;-)
Enjoyed it Nikki thanks for sharing.
Enjoyed it Nikki thanks for sharing.
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5th Feb 2013 1:10am
Hahahahahahhahahah
thanks Blocat!!!! hilarious!!!
best thing I have heard all day!!!
a good seeing to.....hahahahahahah
thanks Blocat!!!! hilarious!!!
best thing I have heard all day!!!
a good seeing to.....hahahahahahah
Re: Oh Empty Me
5th Feb 2013 00:38am
Re: Oh Empty Me
5th Feb 2013 1:06am
no thing
&
emptiness get a bad rap in the midst of 1000s generations of
thee human
delusion of possessing,having,keeping,owning--
all mere clutterances of consciousness--
no thing & emptiness bring a 'lightness of Being' that none of our 'Gotta-Have-It's can reach-
butt i dunno from shit, so....I Like yr Poem
as aye like ye,
nikkimoe
&
emptiness get a bad rap in the midst of 1000s generations of
thee human
delusion of possessing,having,keeping,owning--
all mere clutterances of consciousness--
no thing & emptiness bring a 'lightness of Being' that none of our 'Gotta-Have-It's can reach-
butt i dunno from shit, so....I Like yr Poem
as aye like ye,
nikkimoe
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5th Feb 2013 1:12am
thanks :) fuck it all..... in the end it all fades, shatters and becomes nothing...
nothing wrong with that at all ;)
nothing wrong with that at all ;)
Re: Oh Empty Me
5th Feb 2013 3:44am
this sounds like a conversation with one's self. gr8 opener.well done miss nikki.....
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5th Feb 2013 5:43am
Re: Oh Empty Me
5th Feb 2013 3:06pm
I love when your pen wear it's feelings on it's sleeve.:) This was quite cleverly written! Enjoy it, nikkimore! :)
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Anonymous
9th Feb 2013 5:03pm
Nikki, I keep reading this one, for days now... and it gets me every time. There's something striking about this piece that I can't seem to put into words...
the tongue-in-cheek that ISN'T what it at-first seems. It's stark. But doesn't invoke the usual feelings of "pity me". And the image is a perfect accompaniment. You've confounded my brain and struck a chord at the same time, dammit woman! Well done ;)
the tongue-in-cheek that ISN'T what it at-first seems. It's stark. But doesn't invoke the usual feelings of "pity me". And the image is a perfect accompaniment. You've confounded my brain and struck a chord at the same time, dammit woman! Well done ;)
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9th Feb 2013 5:11pm
Thank you Scat!
me too I keep reading this one over and over, it tickles my brain! my friend and I going to do this spoken word!! glad you feel like I do about this :)
me too I keep reading this one over and over, it tickles my brain! my friend and I going to do this spoken word!! glad you feel like I do about this :)