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Fields
The magnetic field of my soul
is out of whack
it only repels
when it used
to attract
looking up at a mechanical sun
that only shines on other people
second hand rays
minutes and hours
racing through days
easily disgusted
with everything that
surrounds me
I find myself constantly
crossing boundaries
perhaps that's why
my magnet changed
it had to
because the world around me
has come unglued
is out of whack
it only repels
when it used
to attract
looking up at a mechanical sun
that only shines on other people
second hand rays
minutes and hours
racing through days
easily disgusted
with everything that
surrounds me
I find myself constantly
crossing boundaries
perhaps that's why
my magnet changed
it had to
because the world around me
has come unglued
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Re: Fields
Anonymous
29th Jan 2013 4:04pm
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re: Re: Fields
29th Jan 2013 4:13pm
lol :) thanks I think....
I'm fine lmao....I write at work so I just pick up on others vibes that is all :)
I'm fine lmao....I write at work so I just pick up on others vibes that is all :)
Re: Fields
Anonymous
29th Jan 2013 4:21pm
Nailed this one Nikki. The atmosphere of a place/group can really screw up the inner peace if allowed to seep in. Well penned!
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Re: Fields
29th Jan 2013 6:23pm
Liked the feel of this one!
'because the world around me
has come unglued'
great writing :)
'because the world around me
has come unglued'
great writing :)
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Re: Fields
Anonymous
29th Jan 2013 8:17pm
This poem about the magnetic fields of things, places and people is very recognizable...
I know what you mean, Nikki, Ive had that too many times...
I know what you mean, Nikki, Ive had that too many times...
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re: Re: Fields
29th Jan 2013 8:55pm
Re: Fields
29th Jan 2013 10:26pm
I love the way this one feels
its as if you are sitting in the sun
but getting that numb feeling instead of warm
I can relate to this ...ALOT you delivered it well!
Fire
its as if you are sitting in the sun
but getting that numb feeling instead of warm
I can relate to this ...ALOT you delivered it well!
Fire
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Re: Fields
29th Jan 2013 10:41pm
b4 i even read comments i was like "damn thas how i feel at work"....
well done miss nikki......
well done miss nikki......
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Re: Fields
30th Jan 2013 2:56pm
thee onliest thing 'unglued' in this world is Wee, The People....We wee. Not 'you' Or 'me'. Not us Or 'them'.......
~ but that's th'bullshit of mine that makes 'me' so popular ~
ne'erTheeLess, i love readin ms.nikkimoe
~ but that's th'bullshit of mine that makes 'me' so popular ~
ne'erTheeLess, i love readin ms.nikkimoe
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Re: Fields
4th Feb 2013 11:41am
The edge in your voice of this write is well brushed into the wonder-some of a changing world. Somewhat hitting close to home is the idea of whether to make some sort of stand, or merely kick back and let the world to what it shall do--and somewhat hope that they won't outlaw you tomorrow, or the next day. (Yes, mostly speaking metaphorically with that.)
Do you really want a Coke? ;)
Uley
Do you really want a Coke? ;)
Uley
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Re: Fields
4th Feb 2013 5:12pm
*chuckles*
I have always tended to be more of a repeller than an attractor, so I strangely get this in reverse. I am absolutely baffled why someone heads my way, and ponder what threw the universe off course that day. lol
Have to thank the Hubby for sending me this direction to read.
Much enjoyed :)
I have always tended to be more of a repeller than an attractor, so I strangely get this in reverse. I am absolutely baffled why someone heads my way, and ponder what threw the universe off course that day. lol
Have to thank the Hubby for sending me this direction to read.
Much enjoyed :)
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re: Re: Fields
5th Feb 2013 1:26am