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Meaning What?
Transcendence
the claiming of two bodies' elegance
enrichment of guided heat seeking
human passion devices
Saturation
puts movement past the point of infatuation
only tragic it rendered inept
a waste of human fluid so accumulated
for partner pleasing and libidinous release
Divination
the question of origin
too sultry to be declared fully innocent
and too beautiful in interaction to be deemed sacrilegious
Deliberation
contemplation of possibilities
avenues denied find pressure amuck
in other sources of conductive energy
Presentation
barrister waxes the case
to persuade passion's outcome
a variation of the blood of eden
the claiming of two bodies' elegance
enrichment of guided heat seeking
human passion devices
Saturation
puts movement past the point of infatuation
only tragic it rendered inept
a waste of human fluid so accumulated
for partner pleasing and libidinous release
Divination
the question of origin
too sultry to be declared fully innocent
and too beautiful in interaction to be deemed sacrilegious
Deliberation
contemplation of possibilities
avenues denied find pressure amuck
in other sources of conductive energy
Presentation
barrister waxes the case
to persuade passion's outcome
a variation of the blood of eden
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Re: Meaning What?
28th Jan 2013 00:38am
Jazz, liking where your bringing your poetry. this is pretty damn good, well done man
*body's rather than bodies
shine on man
*body's rather than bodies
shine on man
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re: Re: Meaning What?
28th Jan 2013 00:52am
Umm thanks--can't really say I know where that is but hopefully it doesn't hurt the eye of the reader too much.
Thanks for the correction!
Thanks for the correction!
Re: Meaning What?
28th Jan 2013 2:17am
WOW! Im slightly aroused by this piece! Maybe due to your beautiful and sexy ink taking me there or perhaps my recent love making session. Whatever the case.......this is pleasing to me! :)
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re: Re: Meaning What?
28th Jan 2013 2:28am
Hmm sounds like "Heaven On A Sunday"? If yes, McCartney would be smiling at ya.
Re: Meaning What?
28th Jan 2013 3:10am
That is a poem to be proud of Jazz.
The final stanza finished it off perfectly .
Charlie
The final stanza finished it off perfectly .
Charlie
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28th Jan 2013 5:46pm
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re: Re: Meaning What?
28th Jan 2013 5:50pm
Thanks; this actually took 3 days to find the right words, which for me is very different. Generally I have the patience of a gnat when it comes to composition! Even solicited offers of collaboration.
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Re: Meaning What?
28th Jan 2013 6:20am
This does it for you my bro. JAZZ...this poem is your confirmation of a full pledge poet.
I believe your use of bodies' is correct as it shows ownership in plural form.
body = singular ; body's
bodies = plural ; bodies'
I believe your use of bodies' is correct as it shows ownership in plural form.
body = singular ; body's
bodies = plural ; bodies'
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re: Re: Meaning What?
28th Jan 2013 5:56pm
Yeah, I was too lazy to find my collegiate dictionary so I Googled it. You confirmed what I found.
Maybe I will accept that every now and then I come up with something that doesn't suck. Not sure however I give the art the respect it deserves.
Thanks for the encouragement!
Maybe I will accept that every now and then I come up with something that doesn't suck. Not sure however I give the art the respect it deserves.
Thanks for the encouragement!
Re: Meaning What?
28th Jan 2013 9:27am
Really, really good ... going to the reading list.
Fav lines:
"Divination
the question of origin
too sultry to be declared fully innocent
and too beautiful in interaction to be deemed sacrilegious"
Fav lines:
"Divination
the question of origin
too sultry to be declared fully innocent
and too beautiful in interaction to be deemed sacrilegious"
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re: Re: Meaning What?
28th Jan 2013 5:59pm
That is the only stanza that isn't consciously inspired by song lyrics.
Thanks for taking a minute or two to both read and comment.
Thanks for taking a minute or two to both read and comment.
Re: Meaning What?
29th Jan 2013 2:38am
You make my heart, happy! Sigh.
I can smoke a lyrical blunt and get high on your words time & time again. My 1st "reading list" piece. THIS!
Xoxo
I can smoke a lyrical blunt and get high on your words time & time again. My 1st "reading list" piece. THIS!
Xoxo
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re: Re: Meaning What?
29th Jan 2013 2:58am
Wow CeCe, I am humbled and flattered that my attempt to make a poem could have such a positive effect. In turn you brought a smile that will last at least a week, maybe more if Oregon would heat up a bit.
re: re: Re: Meaning What?
29th Jan 2013 6:16am
Lol! Smile on, love!
Thou shalt know he hath giveth me an outstanding perspective on painting scenes vividly.
Xo.
Thou shalt know he hath giveth me an outstanding perspective on painting scenes vividly.
Xo.
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Re: Meaning What?
29th Jan 2013 10:49pm
I shall never read "Websters" Dick-shine-mary again in the same way. And I thought all those thumbed pages were you increasing you intelect.
Clever stuff!
Clever stuff!
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re: Re: Meaning What?
30th Jan 2013 2:31am
More like catching up on the words that didn't make an impression in my youth because the entries in the World Book Encyclopedia didn't have illustrations.
Re: Meaning What?
6th Feb 2013 00:09am
re: Re: Meaning What?
6th Feb 2013 3:41am
Thanks; dealing with daycare children most of the day I have to go beyond Dr.Seuss every now and then.