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Dark Mirror
Is there a mirror darker than my soul
Is there a reflection still of what I once was
Mind mysteries circle awaiting prey
To be revealed at break of day
A dream or reality how to tell
Just a dream with values thereof
Or reality within the confines of my hell
Where once was love
Peering at the dark reflection
Was it introjection caused my change
And damned me for every inflection
Of speech that was not my own truth
I lied to hide my introspection
Which knew I lied to hide my fear
Of rejection
Guilty
Of being human
Is there a reflection still of what I once was
Mind mysteries circle awaiting prey
To be revealed at break of day
A dream or reality how to tell
Just a dream with values thereof
Or reality within the confines of my hell
Where once was love
Peering at the dark reflection
Was it introjection caused my change
And damned me for every inflection
Of speech that was not my own truth
I lied to hide my introspection
Which knew I lied to hide my fear
Of rejection
Guilty
Of being human
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Re: Dark Mirror
14th Jan 2013 6:13pm
A good look inside poem; although sometimes methinks we poets tend to pen exceedingly hard on ourselves. Admire your title, a very compelling read-me poem. :-)
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Re: Dark Mirror
14th Jan 2013 7:46pm
Re: Dark Mirror
Anonymous
- Edited 15th Jan 2013 1:20pm
15th Jan 2013 1:19pm
Cool effort here, B.
Love the thread and these lines:
*Or reality within the confines of my hell
*Is there a mirror darker than my soul
Some queries, if I may.
What is introJECTION? Intended?
Your first two lines ask questions, yet I wonder at the absence of question marks?
Forgotten or intended?
Ah, mirrors....
We seem to be putting an awful heavy load on 'em, hey...
I did too, in one poem....yet they're just glass and special paint!
Yeah, if mirrors could tell the things they saw....
Rock on, B.
Thanks for the share :-)
Cheers
Tidespotter
Love the thread and these lines:
*Or reality within the confines of my hell
*Is there a mirror darker than my soul
Some queries, if I may.
What is introJECTION? Intended?
Your first two lines ask questions, yet I wonder at the absence of question marks?
Forgotten or intended?
Ah, mirrors....
We seem to be putting an awful heavy load on 'em, hey...
I did too, in one poem....yet they're just glass and special paint!
Yeah, if mirrors could tell the things they saw....
Rock on, B.
Thanks for the share :-)
Cheers
Tidespotter
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Re: Dark Mirror
15th Jan 2013 7:56pm
Hi budd,
Thanks for your kind comments always nice to be noticed "Introjection" is the unconscious absorbsion of other peoples ideas or attitudes. It is a term more normally used in Psychoanlysis so yes it was intended.
The question marks were deliberately left out as a reminder to the reader to ask his/her own questions; to give the reader pause to ask their own questions about the meaning of the lines to them. A bit obscure perhaps, maybe a little pretentious even but that was the intention.
Mirrors? Yes they can be a bit overused in poetry but then the mirror of the soul is a spiritual reflection, a meditation rather than an actual physical device although people who practice scrying might reasonably argue otherwise.
Cheers mate :-)
Thanks for your kind comments always nice to be noticed "Introjection" is the unconscious absorbsion of other peoples ideas or attitudes. It is a term more normally used in Psychoanlysis so yes it was intended.
The question marks were deliberately left out as a reminder to the reader to ask his/her own questions; to give the reader pause to ask their own questions about the meaning of the lines to them. A bit obscure perhaps, maybe a little pretentious even but that was the intention.
Mirrors? Yes they can be a bit overused in poetry but then the mirror of the soul is a spiritual reflection, a meditation rather than an actual physical device although people who practice scrying might reasonably argue otherwise.
Cheers mate :-)
re: Re: Dark Mirror
Anonymous
- Edited 20th Jan 2013 12:03pm
20th Jan 2013 12:02pm
Hey, Blocat.
Thanks for your response.
So, from you I learn two new words: introjection and scrying.
Had to go look up the latter...sheesh...then again...I'd rather just say I don't understand than pretend to get it.You dig?
I liked your detailed answers, you're sticking to your guns! Cool.
Unconscious absorption of other peoples' ideas and attitudes...yeah, that kinda happens without one realising it, hey.
Your comment has left a ton of food for thought, indeed:-)
Thanks a ton...and pen on, poet!
Cheers
Tidespotter
Thanks for your response.
So, from you I learn two new words: introjection and scrying.
Had to go look up the latter...sheesh...then again...I'd rather just say I don't understand than pretend to get it.You dig?
I liked your detailed answers, you're sticking to your guns! Cool.
Unconscious absorption of other peoples' ideas and attitudes...yeah, that kinda happens without one realising it, hey.
Your comment has left a ton of food for thought, indeed:-)
Thanks a ton...and pen on, poet!
Cheers
Tidespotter
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re: re: Re: Dark Mirror
20th Jan 2013 12:24pm
Hi,
Thank you kindly for that very honest reponse Tidespotter I thought in retrospect I might have misunderstood you 'cos I didn't mean to sound like a smart arse lecturer.
I learn a lot more when I read a poems than I do when I write them and there are many fine poets on this site that show me how for I have yet to travel along this road.
Thanks again and keep writing mate,
blocat
Thank you kindly for that very honest reponse Tidespotter I thought in retrospect I might have misunderstood you 'cos I didn't mean to sound like a smart arse lecturer.
I learn a lot more when I read a poems than I do when I write them and there are many fine poets on this site that show me how for I have yet to travel along this road.
Thanks again and keep writing mate,
blocat
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Anonymous
- Edited 20th Jan 2013 12:36pm
20th Jan 2013 12:35pm
Well, smart arse lecturer or not, you pen some purty fine lines, fret not.
What's important, is that we SHOW UP.
Critique is a good indicator that we try....that we step out of comfort zones.
If we don't try, we never know how good or in need we are.
I'd rather try any day and know I need to work at something ....than to go soft-options for fear of failure.
So, no misunderstanding on either side, ok :-)
We glean from one another and share some gems, what more could we ask for?
So, please....don't quit penning!
Tidespotter
What's important, is that we SHOW UP.
Critique is a good indicator that we try....that we step out of comfort zones.
If we don't try, we never know how good or in need we are.
I'd rather try any day and know I need to work at something ....than to go soft-options for fear of failure.
So, no misunderstanding on either side, ok :-)
We glean from one another and share some gems, what more could we ask for?
So, please....don't quit penning!
Tidespotter
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Re: Dark Mirror
re: Re: Dark Mirror
16th Jan 2013 6:13pm
Re: Dark Mirror
16th Jan 2013 10:57pm
Very well done with this Blocat, though I may wish for a lighter subject from your pen-- though you cover this base well too. It is more about the wishing well for you than a critical point.
Uley
Uley
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Re: Dark Mirror
17th Jan 2013 00:20am
Hi Uley-Bone,
Thanks for your comment pal a lighter note shall indeed be forthcoming also I'm writing a short story at present which I'll publish soon that has both light and dark and sexy moments.
Watch this space.
Thanks for your comment pal a lighter note shall indeed be forthcoming also I'm writing a short story at present which I'll publish soon that has both light and dark and sexy moments.
Watch this space.