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precious eyes
they look
like they're flirting
it isn't right
but then
i have no claims
on the man
their laughter
i n n o c e n t
or not
discourage me
forcing me to feel
i n s i g n i f i c a n t
perhaps, i
protest too much
but darn it all
those precious eyes
of his
did court me
for a while
like they're flirting
it isn't right
but then
i have no claims
on the man
their laughter
i n n o c e n t
or not
discourage me
forcing me to feel
i n s i g n i f i c a n t
perhaps, i
protest too much
but darn it all
those precious eyes
of his
did court me
for a while
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Re: precious eyes
27th Dec 2012 4:47pm
Lol they did indeed, this is a great observational write
great stuff
marcus
great stuff
marcus
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re: Re: precious eyes
27th Dec 2012 5:20pm
Re: precious eyes
27th Dec 2012 4:51pm
I know this feeling well lol,
watching it sucks, but like you said you have no claims so.......
nice write!
watching it sucks, but like you said you have no claims so.......
nice write!
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re: Re: precious eyes
27th Dec 2012 5:21pm
Re: precious eyes
27th Dec 2012 5:10pm
One can only make one feel insignificant if one allows one too lol ;)
Lovely expression and write Faith. :)
Lovely expression and write Faith. :)
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re: Re: precious eyes
27th Dec 2012 5:23pm
That's true, Magdalena, however, it's how i felt when i experienced it which led to the birth of the poem! Thanks for your wonderful comments. I always enjoy what you have to say.
Re: precious eyes
27th Dec 2012 5:13pm
Loved the ending.."those precious eyes
of his
did court me
for a while"--Personally I enjoy the courting process even without claims!! :)
of his
did court me
for a while"--Personally I enjoy the courting process even without claims!! :)
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re: Re: precious eyes
27th Dec 2012 5:25pm
Yes, it is enjoyable even without havng any claims on the man. Thank you for your wonderful remarks. I really appreciate them. :)
Re: precious eyes
27th Dec 2012 6:29pm
" perhaps, i
protest too much
but darn it all" can relate to this oh so well !
protest too much
but darn it all" can relate to this oh so well !
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re: Re: precious eyes
28th Dec 2012 2:21pm
Re: precious eyes
Anonymous
- Edited 27th Dec 2012 7:41pm
27th Dec 2012 7:40pm
Very interesting poem, Faith. I particularly love the last stanza! Nice one! :)
Carlene
Carlene
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re: Re: precious eyes
28th Dec 2012 2:21pm
Re: precious eyes
28th Dec 2012 00:51am
Well, man who turns his eyes away from such a sweetheart like you, doesn't deserve you. :)
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re: Re: precious eyes
28th Dec 2012 2:22pm
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28th Dec 2012 1:17am
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re: Re: precious eyes
28th Dec 2012 2:24pm
Re: precious eyes
29th Dec 2012 5:04am
Oh how I love this, Faith! I could see the story unfold clearly! Nicely penned! :)
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re: Re: precious eyes
29th Dec 2012 5:50pm