Rainbow Girl

This is maybe a delicate piece.  But I'll say--and it may be just a personal thing--that I'm not that fond of the equating of your feelings and actions to rainbow colors.  It feels like too much of something similar to cliche, and it seems to give your feelings less of a real feel.  It's like you're pinning something that can be so powerful on a set of colors.  But if you still want to run with that, I'd say in reference to the third stanza, while it's written beautifully, a mellow yellow color coming to the face is usually a sign of a medical problem.  I know, I know, it's more methaphorical, but maybe you could use a word other than "face" at the end of the stanza.  I'm not sure how you could end that stanza alternatively, as I said it's written beautifully as it is, but "mellow yellow" and "face" have just too often been put together in association with disease for it to mean what you want it to mean in the public mind.

That being said, the last two stanzas, while still intricately connected to the rainbow theme in the preceding ones, feel a lot more real to me.  Your actual emotions start to overtake the color theme.  You start replacing the light spectrum with your self.

The reason I connected my feelings to emotions is because I do not tell people how I feel easily, I'm normally very guarded about how I feel. In order to start sharing those emotions in a way easier to understand, I connect them to colors. Mad is red. Sad is blue. Happy is yellow. Shy and loving is pink. The list goes on, but it does make my communication with my emotions far easier. Of course, when talking to a lover I am not so cliche, but with poetry I tend to lean that way.

I'll start thinking of a way better to end that sentence, though I doubt I'll modify it because I never edit my work, as I seem to have repeated far too much.

Either way, thank you so much for all your comments and feedback.

That's understandable.  But if you were going to actually send pieces to a magazine publisher, they wouldn't stop to ask you why you associated your feelings with colors.  They'd be too busy looking at other pieces of interest, so they'd just throw it into the "Do Not Publish File."

Now, it works here, and "to each their own," and actually, it works in this particular poem, too, as you save your um...realness for the end, when you're alone, but not among non-social site places, and you don't need to give personal reasons in defense of technical issues--in a place like DUP or other such sites it may make no difference, personal or technical, but to make a real impression on total strangers looking for writing for the sake of interest in the writing itself, as well as in the experience the writer may have gone through, the technical is at least sometimes more important than the personal.

Again, this is a social site, and maybe not the place for strictly technical critiques, but you did ask for honest opinions, and until you say otherwise, I'm sticking to that.

If you're really thankful for my comments, well, you're welcome.  If you're really more annoyed than thankful, well, I guess I've annoyed you some more...

I don't plan to ever publish my poetry outside of DUP. It's rough, I don't like editing it, and personally I think it sucks on occasion. But since I write for myself to release emotions, I guess I'm that writer who doesn't really mind if people like her poetry or not. That and I am far better at stories and prose, I just never have published any here other than bits and pieces of an autobiography I was working on.

I see your point, but as I said above, I write as I like and I store advice for future works. (: Now that I was told 'color' association kills the weight and affect of the point, I probably won't use it anymore in any future poems.

You've annoyed me only three times, and all were because you came off highly offensive instead of giving constructive advice to me, but maybe that's because my work is very personal to me and some words you've said have come off as jabs to me as a person. A common feeling with poetry when things are worded wrong. I have Aspergers so I know all about being unintentionally rude when meaning to be helpful.

For the most part though, your comments are helpful and are going to be used as future reference for pieces I plan to write.