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The Glass
We are broken and either repairing,
or fucked
and we'll never know
unless we stand under the glass
knee-deep in smoke and skin
even if it's just for a heartbeat.
Beguiled or not
I fucking love you
in ideals, where we're feathered
but that doesn't keep the bed warm
when I'm gone.
My shoulders wince
at your nightmares and
that I'll never be able to stop them
and will undoubtedly water,
while your absence is
my only company.
(read by the violet)
Written by
MrAlptraum
(Mr A)
Published 6th Dec 2012
| Edited 16th May 2013
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Re: The Glass
6th Dec 2012 10:14pm
I'll never know what this means:
"unless we stand under the glass
knee-deep in smoke and skin"
You're the master of cryptic, OK? I haven't even figured out the cow tongue one yet. *throws hands up in self-disgust*
The rest I got and like :)
OK, yes, I like the cryptic part too - but argh!
"unless we stand under the glass
knee-deep in smoke and skin"
You're the master of cryptic, OK? I haven't even figured out the cow tongue one yet. *throws hands up in self-disgust*
The rest I got and like :)
OK, yes, I like the cryptic part too - but argh!
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re: Re: The Glass
7th Dec 2012 00:41am
"unless we stand under the glass
knee-deep in smoke and skin"
.
.
cant~couldn't wrap my brain 'round that one either. but, for sure you're as raw with the emotive wording as one can get. really admire how you manage to do more w/ less.
glass o' bit foggy, still
smoove
wit-it
.
.
knee-deep in smoke and skin"
.
.
cant~couldn't wrap my brain 'round that one either. but, for sure you're as raw with the emotive wording as one can get. really admire how you manage to do more w/ less.
glass o' bit foggy, still
smoove
wit-it
.
.
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re: Re: The Glass
8th Dec 2012 9:10pm
What do you mean, never? You could just ask.
I'm glad you liked the bits you didn't get, that probably means something.
I'm glad you liked the bits you didn't get, that probably means something.
re: re: Re: The Glass
8th Dec 2012 9:12pm
re: re: Re: The Glass
9th Dec 2012 9:10am
I could ask...
I get a kick out of deciphering cryptic, but it looks like the answer lies squarely in your thoughts, so I have no chance, heh.
Ah, if you care to spill... I know some poets prefer not to explain.
I will stop digging myself in now.
I get a kick out of deciphering cryptic, but it looks like the answer lies squarely in your thoughts, so I have no chance, heh.
Ah, if you care to spill... I know some poets prefer not to explain.
I will stop digging myself in now.
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re: re: re: Re: The Glass
9th Dec 2012 9:56am
Yeah I'm not much fan of revealing secrets, so, I'll leave a hint:
The butchers would've been broke, and I didn't mean pane.
Hope that helped. :)
The butchers would've been broke, and I didn't mean pane.
Hope that helped. :)
re: re: re: re: Re: The Glass
9th Dec 2012 12:40pm
One of us has highly disturbed images in their head. No more urban dictionary for me. ;)
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Re: The Glass
Anonymous
6th Dec 2012 10:29pm
Beguiled or not
I fucking love you
in ideals, where we're feathered
but that doesn't keep the bed warm
when I'm gone.
The brashness of profanity works really well here. Deep and heartfelt. Don't think I've read much of you that feels personal, but this one does. It's a refreshing insight. Thank you for sharing.
I fucking love you
in ideals, where we're feathered
but that doesn't keep the bed warm
when I'm gone.
The brashness of profanity works really well here. Deep and heartfelt. Don't think I've read much of you that feels personal, but this one does. It's a refreshing insight. Thank you for sharing.
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re: Re: The Glass
8th Dec 2012 9:15pm
Probably the language and abrupt images helped with that.
Yeah it's personal. Thanks for commenting, Missy.
Yeah it's personal. Thanks for commenting, Missy.
re: Re: The Glass
9th Dec 2012 2:03pm
Yep
Felt the same about those lines. Enjoyed this piece for that very reason.
Felt the same about those lines. Enjoyed this piece for that very reason.
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re: re: Re: The Glass
12th Dec 2012 5:58am
Re: The Glass
6th Dec 2012 10:43pm
"We are broken and either repairing, or fucked"
"while your absence is my only company"
Nice write sir!! Enjoyed this, thanks for sharing..
"while your absence is my only company"
Nice write sir!! Enjoyed this, thanks for sharing..
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re: Re: The Glass
8th Dec 2012 9:16pm
Re: The Glass
7th Dec 2012 1:07am
Every word of it..every single word of this.. Priceless. You are a powerhouse..
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re: Re: The Glass
8th Dec 2012 9:17pm
Re: The Glass
7th Dec 2012 4:29am
whether making absence into an intimacy,
intimacy becoming absence, or intimate absence, or...
powerhouse
indeed...
5+ star
rating unto
ratting out thee core of such
t h in g s
intimacy becoming absence, or intimate absence, or...
powerhouse
indeed...
5+ star
rating unto
ratting out thee core of such
t h in g s
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re: Re: The Glass
8th Dec 2012 9:19pm
Not so much making, just being I think.
Thanks for the good thoughts, chief.
Thanks for the good thoughts, chief.
Re: The Glass
7th Dec 2012 3:49pm
"knee-deep in smoke and skin"
In terms of the glass ? This brought the image to my head of smoking hash, and all the disconnected, and yet strangely connected sensations that come with it.
Much enjoyed Mr. A :)
In terms of the glass ? This brought the image to my head of smoking hash, and all the disconnected, and yet strangely connected sensations that come with it.
Much enjoyed Mr. A :)
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re: Re: The Glass
Haha. It's not hash, though recently I keep dreaming of it. Not in a yearning or dreamy way. It just seems to be there.
Cheers for your thoughts, Maggie.
Cheers for your thoughts, Maggie.
re: Re: The Glass
8th Dec 2012 9:33pm
Re: The Glass
8th Dec 2012 7:44pm
You never cease to amaze me Mr A.
'Beguiled or not
I fucking love you
in ideals, where we're feathered
but that doesn't keep the bed warm
when I'm gone.'
extraordinary.
'Beguiled or not
I fucking love you
in ideals, where we're feathered
but that doesn't keep the bed warm
when I'm gone.'
extraordinary.
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re: Re: The Glass
8th Dec 2012 9:35pm
Re: The Glass
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16th May 2013 9:05am