omens of destiny

"The" in L4 of verse two isn't needed. Very good work, funny and beautifully concise. I love this kind of poem, which takes a small observation and blows it up for comic effect. Thanks for the read.

lol, thank you Jack. Glad you enjoyed this comical piece. Not really my regular forte, but glad it works and gets a laugh :)

Peace, Indie

 I agree with jack, although I also read that a handsized spider falling on your head could be quite the omen,Destiny uncared for or unbelieved in is no less destiny... Prob stating the obvious, oh well

lol, thank your lovely comment LB. I kind of see it as taking destiny into my own hands, by not walking under the door. I'm sure it would have been some kind of omen if it had fallen on me without me knowing it was there... like I should pay more attention to my surrounds or something. If it really had fallen on me, I probably would have surmised that the universe is trying to give me a heart attack and that I should quit smoking. x)

Peace, Indie

Indie,
think you are experimenting with shorter versions..I remember I had read one already.
but this one, with clear stanzas, makes it good to grasp the intended nature of character, a bit of smile at S2L4..could imagine the scene vivid,lol. S3, agrees to LB's comments, risking n not caring those too is a part of destiny!

a different read & thanxx fr the share:)

Thank you so much Uma. I've got a few shorter poems, but I agree this one is very clear and well defined. Glad you enjoyed this write.

Peace, Indie