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The Strength of Anna
Her dreams are stitched, torn by fetal tissue
though she only blames herself.
She is hermitic; her own thick eyelid
and she knows this is more revealing than the quivers
in reddened, muddy ditches.
Her fingers are closer together
and her shoulders slouch into her chest
as she huddles over her cooling cup;
she relates somehow, to the skin separating
from the rest of the once warm tea.
She pours the red tea down the dirty sink
that's neglected like everything else.
She hasn't bled for months now.
She decides to take a bath after hacking at the grime,
her spindly bones expose a newly protruding gut;
She almost raised a smile with her shoulders.
As she sleeps, her fingers coil to the tendons' natural tension
as she opens herself to the night.
She hasn't slept so good for a long time.
The morning wades through her curtains
and as it nudges at her shoulder
it fills an empty tub of pills
nestled in her coiled hand, then kisses her belly
as it leaves.
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Re: The Strength of Anna
Anonymous
9th Nov 2012 2:51pm
Damn! Dark in its essence. Great man! I'd remove all punctuation, but that's incidental to the whole piece.
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re: Re: The Strength of Anna
9th Nov 2012 8:35pm
and I thought I was relaxed with the punctuation. Thanks for the words, man.
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Anonymous
9th Nov 2012 3:05pm
I was close to tears when I read this.
That is all.
That is all.
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Re: The Strength of Anna
9th Nov 2012 7:29pm
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"She almost raised a smile with her shoulders."
I admire how you work & word a detail
the mess-age
is always quite sharp
Nice.
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"She almost raised a smile with her shoulders."
I admire how you work & word a detail
the mess-age
is always quite sharp
Nice.
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Re: The Strength of Anna
12th Nov 2012 00:11am
"she relates somehow, to the skin separating
from the rest of the once warm tea" Where do you find these lines, sir ... I'm amazed by your insight.
I see a different 'meaning' each time I've read this over the past few days; part of its appeal, for me. Like listening to Beck, where its the sound of the words themselves, rather than any particular story they tell, which are the point. This piece disturbs, rattles me, yet somehow kisses my belly as I leave, which is why I keep coming back to it.
Killer piece, Mr A.
from the rest of the once warm tea" Where do you find these lines, sir ... I'm amazed by your insight.
I see a different 'meaning' each time I've read this over the past few days; part of its appeal, for me. Like listening to Beck, where its the sound of the words themselves, rather than any particular story they tell, which are the point. This piece disturbs, rattles me, yet somehow kisses my belly as I leave, which is why I keep coming back to it.
Killer piece, Mr A.
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re: Re: The Strength of Anna
12th Nov 2012 12:01pm
It's always the details, Kaatho that bring the reader in for a more personal kick. Not always so easy.
I just put the words there; you do the rest and I'm glad it works.
Thank you very much for the feedback.
I just put the words there; you do the rest and I'm glad it works.
Thank you very much for the feedback.
Re: The Strength of Anna
Anonymous
3rd Mar 2013 9:50pm
This is beauty and sorrow delicately wrapped into one...Well Done!!!!
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4th Mar 2013 9:20am