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Poom Tittle P'poom........
runnin'round
running as-if(like)
hellbent
wit death at heels,
angel's
sweet critique (O'pine!)
say
no-thing gentle head shaking
bluegreen
disbelief of [of]
inability
to belief any-thing
thinkable
in 'human terms'.....
"yes, dear doctor, twas-as-if
a momentary pain
of/in yOur head, stabs
acute sharp
(almost blinding)
& goes'way slippin on it's own denials..."
do ye 'remember? when?...' living in th'context
of death-or-alive,
as if alive,living for that
fun-filled future
t'Have It My Way, to Be It
as Iyam
fuckly foolenough to pre'scribe
thru
me motherbr'otherly dead daddy'dada(esque)
dilly'dally
daydream, wh'ere all are togather'd
Together Again
all justlike/as-if
No Thing
had ever happened, & yes, yeah for-sure,
no thing evernever
did happen ---'least
not like any-of-us th'ought 'it' did
xxxxxxdkzk2012octoxxxxxx~~~~~~~~~~~~
(--*foto*by*DKZK*aswell*--)
running as-if(like)
hellbent
wit death at heels,
angel's
sweet critique (O'pine!)
say
no-thing gentle head shaking
bluegreen
disbelief of [of]
inability
to belief any-thing
thinkable
in 'human terms'.....
"yes, dear doctor, twas-as-if
a momentary pain
of/in yOur head, stabs
acute sharp
(almost blinding)
& goes'way slippin on it's own denials..."
do ye 'remember? when?...' living in th'context
of death-or-alive,
as if alive,living for that
fun-filled future
t'Have It My Way, to Be It
as Iyam
fuckly foolenough to pre'scribe
thru
me motherbr'otherly dead daddy'dada(esque)
dilly'dally
daydream, wh'ere all are togather'd
Together Again
all justlike/as-if
No Thing
had ever happened, & yes, yeah for-sure,
no thing evernever
did happen ---'least
not like any-of-us th'ought 'it' did
xxxxxxdkzk2012octoxxxxxx~~~~~~~~~~~~
(--*foto*by*DKZK*aswell*--)
Published 10th Oct 2012
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10th Oct 2012 5:31pm
Loved the ending. Everyone wants to change what really happened. I really enjoy your writing. I have to read between the lines but that's ok I like a challenge xoxo Daniel
10th Oct 2012 7:16pm
10th Oct 2012 5:38pm
i like this work quite a bit. the first thing, though, which struck a chord with me is the visual impact of the way you have chosen to lay it out. i look forward to digging through more of your work. thanks.
10th Oct 2012 7:19pm
muchthanks for digging
my diggings & takin thee
time
t'say so....
g'odd bless ye,dear
my diggings & takin thee
time
t'say so....
g'odd bless ye,dear
11th Oct 2012 10:22am
opens up so many subtly felt essence of thoughts we derive upon in daily acts ..so blatant so daniel-ish way!
esp. loved the dada-esque & the whole S3 with gre8 wordplay too.
thank you fr this admirable art!
~uma.
esp. loved the dada-esque & the whole S3 with gre8 wordplay too.
thank you fr this admirable art!
~uma.
15th Oct 2012 6:47pm
15th Oct 2012 5:32pm
'Scuse if this sounds like me prattling on, reading far too much into words that exist greatly on their own, but: I love that word 'Iyam' that you use here. Firstly cause of the word 'yam': seems to knock that boldly self-important phrase 'I am' off its perch and make it into something earthy and comically inexpressive. There's something much more honest and organic about a root vegetable than a over-used proclamation. And also because it reminds me of kids shouting 'I am, I am, I am' in that way they do when they're angry; makes a word lose its meaning and become a shape of a sound instead. Which I think is really interesting.
'...fuckly foolenough' makes me smile.
And a quick lastly (before I bore you to tears), I like that little compressed verse of almost-realisation in the middle. it pierces in between the two looser verses just like that pain it describes.
(P.S. A bit unrelated, but had to say: that little Alice doggy that keeps nudging her way into some of your other words looks like a real cutie.)
'...fuckly foolenough' makes me smile.
And a quick lastly (before I bore you to tears), I like that little compressed verse of almost-realisation in the middle. it pierces in between the two looser verses just like that pain it describes.
(P.S. A bit unrelated, but had to say: that little Alice doggy that keeps nudging her way into some of your other words looks like a real cutie.)
15th Oct 2012 6:54pm
& yet an'other "wow" commentary.
Babe, ye hit thee nail rite up'on my head.
eye
been using Iyam for years For That Very Reason.
it started wit
a dumb Descarte joke i made, "I Think therefore I'm Yam".....
yes...thee self-important human-wankering in Art & everything wee do got way outta hand thousans'o years ago......
thank ye ever-so-much....Alice yaps 'howdy' to ye.
Babe, ye hit thee nail rite up'on my head.
eye
been using Iyam for years For That Very Reason.
it started wit
a dumb Descarte joke i made, "I Think therefore I'm Yam".....
yes...thee self-important human-wankering in Art & everything wee do got way outta hand thousans'o years ago......
thank ye ever-so-much....Alice yaps 'howdy' to ye.
