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I Hear Him Goddess.. So Wicked, So Tempting
What is it that you want from me?
Why is it that I hear you're screams..
I banished you so long ago
Yet you still fill me with you're wretched sole..
I'm sick of drowning in you're curse
Its like I'm changing like you rehearsed
So long ago it seems...
When you haunted me awake, in dreams
The man who grins and laughs at me...
A ghastly shadow, I won't be free..
From you a, monster, just let me be..
O great goodness..
I'm lost, confused..
I know the reason I'm so abused..
Why can't I find the strength inside of me..
To forgive myself and be set free..
To love the world with all I am
Instead of seeing me as damned..
To find true beauty in you're craft..
I'm just black inside and always trapped..
I wear my silver proudly around my neck
Though I know I'm wicked, far from perfect
I know you wouldn't give me more than I can handle
But goddess why can't I just light the candle..
And believe the words I know so pure
In my minds eye i know what's instore..
But in natures blessed gift..
I find my soul begging to drift..
Just like in my days of old..
When I lashed out in spite, so cold..
I see his face watch me again..
This time I just don't think that I can..
Save myself from his hypnotic trance..
He wants me for some demonic dance..
He lusted for me since I, a child,
Could sense the terror of the wild..
He started whispering inside my ear..
And I remember all the fear
When he tortured my every waking hour..
And he stole all my will, my little power..
I know I've had four years to grow..
And that my aura has a stronger flow..
I'm still so scared cause I'm losing my grasp
My light is dimming like my heart will collapse
I see the ring of blood upon the Moon
What is it great mother, my impending doom?
I need to find my tigers eye..
For I fear great tragedy will soon arise..
I lost my silver pentagon..
My most trusted protection is now gone
What horrid form of sorcery
Would wish this karma unto me..
His nightly visits temp me so
To forget what all should always know..
I love the gift you blessed me with
But it seems my power has begun to shift
Back into my darkest days
When hatred was all that remained..
Inside my mind.. When I was blind
I hear him tempting my athame..
To slay my life in the name of them..
Please help me save me from myself..
For I fear it's beyond all mortal help..
Why is it that I hear you're screams..
I banished you so long ago
Yet you still fill me with you're wretched sole..
I'm sick of drowning in you're curse
Its like I'm changing like you rehearsed
So long ago it seems...
When you haunted me awake, in dreams
The man who grins and laughs at me...
A ghastly shadow, I won't be free..
From you a, monster, just let me be..
O great goodness..
I'm lost, confused..
I know the reason I'm so abused..
Why can't I find the strength inside of me..
To forgive myself and be set free..
To love the world with all I am
Instead of seeing me as damned..
To find true beauty in you're craft..
I'm just black inside and always trapped..
I wear my silver proudly around my neck
Though I know I'm wicked, far from perfect
I know you wouldn't give me more than I can handle
But goddess why can't I just light the candle..
And believe the words I know so pure
In my minds eye i know what's instore..
But in natures blessed gift..
I find my soul begging to drift..
Just like in my days of old..
When I lashed out in spite, so cold..
I see his face watch me again..
This time I just don't think that I can..
Save myself from his hypnotic trance..
He wants me for some demonic dance..
He lusted for me since I, a child,
Could sense the terror of the wild..
He started whispering inside my ear..
And I remember all the fear
When he tortured my every waking hour..
And he stole all my will, my little power..
I know I've had four years to grow..
And that my aura has a stronger flow..
I'm still so scared cause I'm losing my grasp
My light is dimming like my heart will collapse
I see the ring of blood upon the Moon
What is it great mother, my impending doom?
I need to find my tigers eye..
For I fear great tragedy will soon arise..
I lost my silver pentagon..
My most trusted protection is now gone
What horrid form of sorcery
Would wish this karma unto me..
His nightly visits temp me so
To forget what all should always know..
I love the gift you blessed me with
But it seems my power has begun to shift
Back into my darkest days
When hatred was all that remained..
Inside my mind.. When I was blind
I hear him tempting my athame..
To slay my life in the name of them..
Please help me save me from myself..
For I fear it's beyond all mortal help..
Published 22nd Sep 2012
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23rd Sep 2012 7:33am
I enjoyed the rhyme across lines
and if had a good flow and pace
It is long and dark and a bit scary
so that's good you placed in this
section of the site, I'm thinking whether
slightly shorter, only slighted though, may
Assist the reader and hone the effect
you desire. I read it aloud and got alot
out of the haunting read, be a good audio
Too, hope I'm offering constructive feedback
as you've asked, I'm glad I read it as it felt
like a dark journey, I'm thinking maybe
only 2-4 lines briefer and that would be
sufficient for the effect you what.
It's not easy to cull and I wouldn't
be too fussed if you can't as I have
some long poems I struggle to edit,
I loved the silver and sorcery bits!
Overall a magestic write so
very well done
Best wishes
Ricecake
and if had a good flow and pace
It is long and dark and a bit scary
so that's good you placed in this
section of the site, I'm thinking whether
slightly shorter, only slighted though, may
Assist the reader and hone the effect
you desire. I read it aloud and got alot
out of the haunting read, be a good audio
Too, hope I'm offering constructive feedback
as you've asked, I'm glad I read it as it felt
like a dark journey, I'm thinking maybe
only 2-4 lines briefer and that would be
sufficient for the effect you what.
It's not easy to cull and I wouldn't
be too fussed if you can't as I have
some long poems I struggle to edit,
I loved the silver and sorcery bits!
Overall a magestic write so
very well done
Best wishes
Ricecake
2nd Oct 2012 00:00am
Thank you for you're honest critisism. I agree it would help the flow if it was a tad bit shorter but i'm just not sure where to edit... what to take out. At that momment in time every word seemed to work so i think i'll just keep it this way :) it might not go over with every one, but hey, its my poem. Anyways, thanks for such an analyzed comment ricecake.
23rd Sep 2012 7:35am
Anonymous
28th Sep 2012 6:05pm
Vevoking very nicely done.....I could see the smoke rise and all that was missing is an invoking evil laughter...
Haunted tale, good one!
Haunted tale, good one!
