(ViaPureRandumbAccident,ThisBecame) My Next Poom

I'm sorry, but you asked for honest critique and so I'm going to say that this poem is unreadable. I don't know if you have dyslexia or English is your second language. If either is the case, then I really think you should work on developing your language skills. No literate person could honestly describe this as a good poem. I'm sure it has the potential to be a good poem, but it's strangled to death by the presentation. Of course I could be miles from the mark and this is a Finnegan's Wake-esque piece of comic intellectual wordplay which I'm not educated enough in various subjects to understand. But I doubt it.

Very good.....

i'm very literate...over-literate p'haps..ha

of course i would never compare to mrJoyce (or mrFinegan)

tis all done quite puposely
fully taking into account that most here would brand them 'unreadable' drivel.....but after posting over300, y'r the 1st to have the 'guts' t'call me out on it directly.

i happen to be trapped in a mindset where human absurdity seems far more valid (daresay 'real') than what wee dispercieve as our common reality, so it's like dada is da only way to go, using this creative art to (gently)push the limits of our absurdity.

i'm old enough now to be unconcerned wit contriving to craft proper poetry that 'makes' the reader think what i think i'm thinking. whatever 'thoughts' stimulate what comes out wordly, are spontaneous, & immediately dispensed wit...some people call it a 'zen thing', & while it is a 'zen thing', the term has been commerced into meaninglessness, as wit o'so manymany words wee ascribe to a 'reality' that's as flimsy as a wet cardboard box (hey, there's a meta4 4ya).... so, it's like all that keeps bringing what's-left-of-me back to dada'bsurdity of absurdly reconfiguring word,grammar,syntax,etc. in as sensibly(in dada perspective) ridiculous a reflection of what wee, humanity, has made of Our World.

i guess the 'fact' that 'my work' stimulates so little 'comment' is circumstantial evidence of my Being Invalid as A Poet.....however i do have a number of very 'literate' folks here who find me interesting,'readable', & (hard2believe) inspiring.

thank you for speaking up, but pleas do not save a place for me in the DUP Remedial English forum.

peace be, br'other Jack

I was told you had an issue. So I never asked. I read between the lines. And my family sound like you write. Broken English. Anyways I like the coin part :-)

ha...that's sweet, Gigi.....thankyou

but what's wit
"I heard you had issues"?

is somebody DUP'ping about 'me' behind my cyber'back?

whatever....g'odd bless'em & you too,dear

No not at all. They spoke very highly of you very. That's why I'm here reading your words. :-)