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no formalities *
never been afraid
of silence.
we always got on well.
safely tucked under the
blankets until a knock
on the door was heard.
*no capital letters. just small ones.
of silence.
we always got on well.
safely tucked under the
blankets until a knock
on the door was heard.
*no capital letters. just small ones.
Published 25th Aug 2012
| Edited 26th Aug 2012
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26th Aug 2012 6:46am
This has been actually the fact with me Ophie and me friendship with silence came to an end in 2010. Very delicately said through these few free verses.
26th Aug 2012 9:21am
Im glad your friendship with silence ended :)
I very much appreciate your kind words - as usual.
I very much appreciate your kind words - as usual.
26th Aug 2012 12:54pm
ophie.
good job, leaves a bit for the imagination to work with.
might be an idea to change i on the third line to 'we, I think it would make more sense to the casual eye.
good job, leaves a bit for the imagination to work with.
might be an idea to change i on the third line to 'we, I think it would make more sense to the casual eye.
26th Aug 2012 2:50pm
thanks for your kind words E :)
that's a good idea to be honest. i quite like the 'we' instead of the 'i'
thanks again :)
that's a good idea to be honest. i quite like the 'we' instead of the 'i'
thanks again :)
23rd Sep 2012 9:47am
aah! very creative here opheliac.
the asterisk n its intended meaning...very well done indeed!
looking forward to your writes n yes, there is a sweet compelling need to go through your v.short yet imaginative works here!
thank you fr shares.
~uma.
the asterisk n its intended meaning...very well done indeed!
looking forward to your writes n yes, there is a sweet compelling need to go through your v.short yet imaginative works here!
thank you fr shares.
~uma.
24th Sep 2012 8:34am
You know I'm crazy about the things you write.
Deep verses, emotionally charged and so difficult to comment.
You throw a seed that grows in the imagination of the reader.
Inspiring.
A kiss
Luca
Deep verses, emotionally charged and so difficult to comment.
You throw a seed that grows in the imagination of the reader.
Inspiring.
A kiss
Luca
25th Sep 2012 9:39pm
28th Sep 2012 4:31pm
Ophie
noone says it quite.:]
such comfort in these lines that depict
your tryst with solitude. it almost
makes the reader smile fondly cos'
almost everyone can relate to
the said relationship.
thank you for sharing
this dear one.
power,
sumeet
noone says it quite.:]
such comfort in these lines that depict
your tryst with solitude. it almost
makes the reader smile fondly cos'
almost everyone can relate to
the said relationship.
thank you for sharing
this dear one.
power,
sumeet
22nd Oct 2012 5:03pm
Was the "knock on the door" someone's parents? Nicely written poem. As I said before, you certainly have talent for shorter poems. And someone above even sent you a "kiss." WOW!!!!!
22nd Oct 2012 8:41pm
No it wasn't someone's parents. Thank you Marcella. Having my poems read by you or even receiving comments from you it's an honour. You know how much i love your writing and intelligence.
haha yes, that must have been Luca! He's a fantastic guy :)
haha yes, that must have been Luca! He's a fantastic guy :)
