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Passive
I might've told you a story
if it wasn't today and I wasn't spent of all thoughtful meaning.
I could've wandered, up and down your corridor, study, general area spouting my sound to a one man crowd who has already
pressed mute.
Instead I'll roll another cigarette and make a pot of coffee,
hope to God that the fruit and yoghurt last night pay off.
I'm sick of looking in the mirror, it never gets thinner
or closer to the woman I wish I could be. I make a formal request for a circus mirror.
See, I'm five foot six, no less and no more. (Stopped growing a while back due to smoking.)
I've a sore spot for vanilla and double cream
and these bones continue aching, though the doctors say I am fine
and I stare at nothing in particular for hours.
This is my accomplishment, boredom squared
and divided by fleeing moments of better times
and subtracted with parts of my sanity. I am
sat, a bag of bones, stuck to a chair.
if it wasn't today and I wasn't spent of all thoughtful meaning.
I could've wandered, up and down your corridor, study, general area spouting my sound to a one man crowd who has already
pressed mute.
Instead I'll roll another cigarette and make a pot of coffee,
hope to God that the fruit and yoghurt last night pay off.
I'm sick of looking in the mirror, it never gets thinner
or closer to the woman I wish I could be. I make a formal request for a circus mirror.
See, I'm five foot six, no less and no more. (Stopped growing a while back due to smoking.)
I've a sore spot for vanilla and double cream
and these bones continue aching, though the doctors say I am fine
and I stare at nothing in particular for hours.
This is my accomplishment, boredom squared
and divided by fleeing moments of better times
and subtracted with parts of my sanity. I am
sat, a bag of bones, stuck to a chair.
Published 23rd Aug 2012
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23rd Aug 2012 2:51pm
Five foot six isn't bad for a woman, LA.
I can relate in some degree to the general feel of this. Times are moving fast at a motionless pace.
You do write very feminine poetry, and you do it extremely well with a good sense of honesty.
I love the equation and ultimate conclusion at the end and there's a good rhythm through your lines in this one, quite poetic.
Excellent work, no critique.
I can relate in some degree to the general feel of this. Times are moving fast at a motionless pace.
You do write very feminine poetry, and you do it extremely well with a good sense of honesty.
I love the equation and ultimate conclusion at the end and there's a good rhythm through your lines in this one, quite poetic.
Excellent work, no critique.
23rd Aug 2012 4:12pm
Thank you, Mr A.
I'm not complaining too much on the height. I chose to be with someone nearly a foot taller than me. Thank you for the comments, I try not to include too many insecurities when I write but obvious a few little niggles of myself came in handy here.
:)
LA.
I'm not complaining too much on the height. I chose to be with someone nearly a foot taller than me. Thank you for the comments, I try not to include too many insecurities when I write but obvious a few little niggles of myself came in handy here.
:)
LA.
3rd Sep 2012 6:47am
3rd Sep 2012 2:21pm
4th Sep 2012 8:25am
It matters not in the least to me that it's femenin , it's simple a great work of art, some of us can paint with words, does't most other things pale in comparence? I can tell you that no one sees themselves through the eyes of another, therefore they do not really know how they appear to people, my love is more beautiful than I could possibly explain with words,[though I call myself a poet] the only problem is that she does't think so, that's fine though I don't mind reassuring her every single day. as for your work I personally think vision should be a virtue, and you have it.
I'll visit you in my free time, thank you
Sabbath
I'll visit you in my free time, thank you
Sabbath
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