the placebo effect

Let me start with, I love it. Now that that's said, I think the line "their glorious dysfunction filling my lungs until all I could breathe" seems awkwardly worded. I think it's the word "their," which I assume refers to the teenagers in the first line, but reads like it's referring to Placebo, which of course is singular. Perhaps "that" or "the" or some other word would better suit it? Or a change in punctuation. It's entirely too late here for me to come to a conclusion I like on it. But I really loved the tone of this piece, and of course the last two lines took it away and nailed the heart of it, despite the first three lines explaining the general idea (which I also liked). Short, sweet.

Thank you Mike for your thoughtful feedback. The "their" in line two refers to Placebo (the band), not teenagers. Glad you enjoyed this piece.

Peace, Indie

*lightbulb* Oooooooh. That makes much more sense. I was wondering why you turned Placebo into a proper noun, haha; I assumed you were personifying the idea, which also didn't make perfect sense. I've never listened to Placebo so I never thought that way. Thanks for the clarification.

lol, no worries, and you're welcome x)  
 
I figured the reference had been missed. It is a little obscure for anyone that's not a Placebo listener. The italicised "without you I'm nothing at all" is a line from one of their songs with the same title, but I wouldn't really recommend listening to it, its more on the morbidly melancholy end of their stuff.