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how to make gold from excreta
okay it has been done to death
overused overhyped overdone
a recurring cliche that is the theme
of a million movies a billion books
a zillion poems
forcibly made to evolve into
a trillion different things
all trash if at all anything
truth is
only a chosen few experience it
in its purest essence
the rest just pretend
melodramatic and drab they drag
sleepwalk bump cross copulate
populate grow indifferent
cheat hit dump cry
get rid of chase perish
end
their
lives
by
popping pills diving or driving
off cliffs or into traffic
believing that
the four lettered word
took its toll
claimed another victim
unsuccessfully
knowing it all
too well deep down
that
everything
was a
miserable lie
that no polygraph
could capture
cause everything
starts as a lie
even love
Published 17th Jun 2012
| Edited 19th Jun 2012
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17th Jun 2012 6:25pm
a silly question to start of: is there a specific reason for leaving so much space in the title? I know it sounds quite foolish to ask but i was curious as most of your poems - if not all - have the same format in their titles.
Enjambement has become your unique style, i suppose, and i really like that. I like the fact that you're daring when it comes to poetic techniques; and your poems are always very well written and profound. It's evident that you've spent a significant amount of time reading various subjects. Therefore, your poems have become conclusions/opinions/responses to the things you've read over time.
*hat tipping*
Enjambement has become your unique style, i suppose, and i really like that. I like the fact that you're daring when it comes to poetic techniques; and your poems are always very well written and profound. It's evident that you've spent a significant amount of time reading various subjects. Therefore, your poems have become conclusions/opinions/responses to the things you've read over time.
*hat tipping*
18th Jun 2012 2:00am
Opheliac
I will answer your question afterwards. And it's light years away from anything remotely foolish.
Enjambment. The first time you had mentioned it, I had to look it up in the dictionary. The idea was to remember it for future. Sigh. I had to look it up again today. Well, it is more of an accident to be very honest. I am a untrained ronin in all essence in a camp of trained samurais. Probably that's the reason all these accidents have worked for me. And it is surely a good thing.
I wish that part about reading were true. I have a mammoth collection of books [Close to 5000, paperbacks, hard covers and E-books] but have not read more than 50 of those. Being observant is my secret cause I have learnt a lot and all of it seeps into my writing. And it was quite an observation [More like a secret line that connects everything here]
Thank you for everything you had to say.
Sumeet
p.s- Now the question. Wait, I will probably PM.:)
I will answer your question afterwards. And it's light years away from anything remotely foolish.
Enjambment. The first time you had mentioned it, I had to look it up in the dictionary. The idea was to remember it for future. Sigh. I had to look it up again today. Well, it is more of an accident to be very honest. I am a untrained ronin in all essence in a camp of trained samurais. Probably that's the reason all these accidents have worked for me. And it is surely a good thing.
I wish that part about reading were true. I have a mammoth collection of books [Close to 5000, paperbacks, hard covers and E-books] but have not read more than 50 of those. Being observant is my secret cause I have learnt a lot and all of it seeps into my writing. And it was quite an observation [More like a secret line that connects everything here]
Thank you for everything you had to say.
Sumeet
p.s- Now the question. Wait, I will probably PM.:)
Anonymous
17th Jun 2012 8:49pm
I'm on my phone right now and it's a pain to type anything lengthy, so I apologize for keeping this brief in advance. I agree with ophie about your style being very unique. The spaces seem to be your signature and I've always thought that your poems would be interesting spoken because of those spaces. One thing- in "popping pills or diving or driving/into traffic or off cliffs" I would maybe reverse the order in one so diving/off cliffs and driving/into traffic were in the same order if that makes sense
aglitch
No apologies [In Kobain's angst ridden voice]
It's more of an accident than a style to be honest. I am glad it has worked so far. That was a keen observation and I have changed that bit. [Dive/Drive-it was a glitch for sure.]
Spaces can be interesting. Yes. Spoken is alien territory, but even Mars was vanquished at last.
Thank you for stopping by. Always happy.
Sumeet
No apologies [In Kobain's angst ridden voice]
It's more of an accident than a style to be honest. I am glad it has worked so far. That was a keen observation and I have changed that bit. [Dive/Drive-it was a glitch for sure.]
Spaces can be interesting. Yes. Spoken is alien territory, but even Mars was vanquished at last.
Thank you for stopping by. Always happy.
Sumeet
