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Pencilled journey
war is innate to humans
in grief struck times
we leave our battered fields
twenty three years ago
these white fumes
and blood shot eyes
I ignored every warning
while brooding looms are spinning
into reddening festering formations
my clenched grip illuminates
ink blotted figures escape
today
I nailed each carcass
watched it speak
shouting tarnished tales
cloaked blessed obsessed
plagued I stand amidst
humanity
dead among the living
only I was allowed this transition
tell me who owns the wind
burn not these bridges
let the echo chambers
quiver while I closed the lid
he lay within the carcass
I listened to each embryo
frequencies now fading
into violent violence
cascading from stagnant
waters we willed the steam
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in grief struck times
we leave our battered fields
twenty three years ago
these white fumes
and blood shot eyes
I ignored every warning
while brooding looms are spinning
into reddening festering formations
my clenched grip illuminates
ink blotted figures escape
today
I nailed each carcass
watched it speak
shouting tarnished tales
cloaked blessed obsessed
plagued I stand amidst
humanity
dead among the living
only I was allowed this transition
tell me who owns the wind
burn not these bridges
let the echo chambers
quiver while I closed the lid
he lay within the carcass
I listened to each embryo
frequencies now fading
into violent violence
cascading from stagnant
waters we willed the steam
copyrights © owned by Rianne 2025
all rights reserved
Published 3rd Feb 2025
| Edited 4th Feb 2025
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3rd Feb 2025 8:55pm
5th Feb 2025 3:25pm
Thank you for sharing your reflections, if a poem of mine brings forth strong reactions than thats a compliment for me. Greetings love and blessings, Rianne
3rd Feb 2025 9:44pm
Powerful write, Rianne. Pulls at the heartstrings. Appreciate you.
Damian
Damian
5th Feb 2025 3:26pm
Thank you Damian, for sharing your reflections, greetings and blessings, Rianne
4th Feb 2025 3:47pm
the first stanza sets all the memories n histories n ongoing weakening pain n deaths told retold .. in such moving way Rianne .. I feel the meek humans give in to the death n violence all miscreated by the miscreant humans.. & as victims as remnants in the left out cowardice or repentance.. one stands a mere lifeless vessel .. as a haunting bridge of those lost & the lost self itself.. in a painful continuum & testimonial to all the wars n violence .. just me from your epic verses R xxxx
5th Feb 2025 3:33pm
Thank you dear Uma for sharing all the insights on this poem and diving so deeply into it, much appreciation! Greetings, love and blessings xox Rianne
5th Feb 2025 3:01pm
Oh, the pain of knowing, oh, the pain of not knowing... oh, the pain is always the same no matter where.
5th Feb 2025 3:42pm
Thank you dear Paulo for stopping by and leaving your thoughts on this piece, yes very true, the pain is always the same, greetings love and blessings,
Rianne
Rianne
Anonymous
7th Feb 2025 5:12pm
"dead among the living
only I was allowed this transition
tell me who owns the wind
burn not these bridges
let the echo chambers
quiver while I closed the lid "
This poem deeply describes the world we are living in now where a president who has many multiple sexual allegations against him including a 13 year old girl can get into power. Kids are killing themselves over losing their faith in humanity and your poem deeply explores that link of innocence being exposed to the vile corruption. The media these days have far more cameras to show the world and their negativity has a massive impact on kids.
I was talking to a 12 year old poet girl once who who was very anxious and I said to her, just do what I do and do not watch the news. She replied, I can't escape it as my friends talk about it the next day. I had no response to that......
"he lay within the carcass
I listened to each embryo
frequencies now fading "
only I was allowed this transition
tell me who owns the wind
burn not these bridges
let the echo chambers
quiver while I closed the lid "
This poem deeply describes the world we are living in now where a president who has many multiple sexual allegations against him including a 13 year old girl can get into power. Kids are killing themselves over losing their faith in humanity and your poem deeply explores that link of innocence being exposed to the vile corruption. The media these days have far more cameras to show the world and their negativity has a massive impact on kids.
I was talking to a 12 year old poet girl once who who was very anxious and I said to her, just do what I do and do not watch the news. She replied, I can't escape it as my friends talk about it the next day. I had no response to that......
"he lay within the carcass
I listened to each embryo
frequencies now fading "
7th Feb 2025 5:30pm
Thank you Ryan, I highly appreciate your reflections thoughts and insights and little topics discussed. The world is not ours anymore. Its out of orbit, loosened from its stratosphere. So much suffering that all of us are taking for granted. I heard something that i liked once which was, we are born human though are biggest lesson is to become human again.
I do not have tv nor follow the news. The world is still changing but ever so charged and drenched. Too sad for words that children can not be children anymore. However nobody stands up to say stop.
I dont have answers but I do have hope and also try to write things to perhaps get across a thought or two
greetings and blessings on your path
Rianne
I do not have tv nor follow the news. The world is still changing but ever so charged and drenched. Too sad for words that children can not be children anymore. However nobody stands up to say stop.
I dont have answers but I do have hope and also try to write things to perhaps get across a thought or two
greetings and blessings on your path
Rianne
Anonymous
7th Feb 2025 5:57pm
You did well with this one. In Australia, under 16 year olds can no longer access popular certain sites.
https://www.esafety.gov.au/about-us/industry-regulation/social-media-age-restrictions#:~:text=The%20Online%20Safety%20Amendment%20(Social,safer%20digital%20spaces%20for%20everyone.
Its a good thing for once, and I hope the social media bots can keep the kids out. There will be penalties for abuse.
https://www.esafety.gov.au/about-us/industry-regulation/social-media-age-restrictions#:~:text=The%20Online%20Safety%20Amendment%20(Social,safer%20digital%20spaces%20for%20everyone.
Its a good thing for once, and I hope the social media bots can keep the kids out. There will be penalties for abuse.
7th Feb 2025 6:04pm
This is a good change, I am all for that, I am not opposed of data restrictions. I have heard in a podcast series I follow that 2030 is expected as a huge change. For now we will see Most of the madness has gone on long enough.
