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Time after you
There was a time when you and they
Or maybe them
Went away
The sort of away that means to say
For always
And forever after
So there was only I, or me
To stand and wave
Hello, goodbye
Through tears
That were many
Or maybe...
Just a few
...at least one or two
Or maybe them
Went away
The sort of away that means to say
For always
And forever after
So there was only I, or me
To stand and wave
Hello, goodbye
Through tears
That were many
Or maybe...
Just a few
...at least one or two
Published 23rd May 2012
| Edited 1st Aug 2012
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23rd May 2012 9:04pm
Nice poem. I like the way it has been constructed. It reminds me of rambling embarrassed explanation, but it leaves me to wonder who the explanation is to...
Again, nice one.
Again, nice one.
23rd May 2012 10:54pm
I'm glad you liked it and your right this is kind of an explanation but more to a friend about how the relationship looked from an outsiders view
thank you for the comment though
K and G
thank you for the comment though
K and G
23rd May 2012 11:04pm
You know, there's something about this poem that pulls you in, its different from what i'm used to reading, maybe the creativity and play of words is what does it, im not sure, but whatever it is you have a formula that works here.
20th Feb 2013 8:03pm
