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The choppy pewter gray lake,
is a view that causes mistakes to vacate.
Life wasn't meant to hesitate.
I seek the tall black bark elder trees.
They hold the knowledge of the free.
The foliage is vanishing fast,
the soil hungers for leaves.
Lemon and rust color
lingers to please.
The beauty of autumn paints the soul.
As winter is greedy to unleash it's cold.
Whispers of return, the barren limbs are told.
is a view that causes mistakes to vacate.
Life wasn't meant to hesitate.
I seek the tall black bark elder trees.
They hold the knowledge of the free.
The foliage is vanishing fast,
the soil hungers for leaves.
Lemon and rust color
lingers to please.
The beauty of autumn paints the soul.
As winter is greedy to unleash it's cold.
Whispers of return, the barren limbs are told.
Published 26th Oct 2024
Author's Note
Pic taken by my friend Krista Verrastro at a reservoir in Maryland.
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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26th Oct 2024 7:49pm
26th Oct 2024 7:51pm
Thank you....autumn will soon be winter.
Hope you are enjoying your travels.
Hope you are enjoying your travels.
26th Oct 2024 7:59pm
26th Oct 2024 8:00pm
I have a group of trees in Brooklyn and in the Poconos
that I vibe with...not the same but similar.
Luvin this
that I vibe with...not the same but similar.
Luvin this
26th Oct 2024 8:05pm
26th Oct 2024 8:20pm
I’d love to go somewhere like this and soak in the view while my mistakes vacate.
Beautifully expressed, girl.
Beautifully expressed, girl.
26th Oct 2024 8:28pm
Someday I will return. Right now I live vicariously through my friends hiking pics.
I'd love to go there with you. Thank you!
I'd love to go there with you. Thank you!
26th Oct 2024 8:32pm
I would too (hugs).
We could sit together and share coffee, tears and smiles. I could think of nobody else I’d rather be with💕
We could sit together and share coffee, tears and smiles. I could think of nobody else I’d rather be with💕
27th Oct 2024 00:14am
26th Oct 2024 8:58pm
27th Oct 2024 00:16am
26th Oct 2024 10:28pm
Greedy winter is on its way.
I really like the images you have created here.
Autumn is such a beautiful time.
Regards James
I really like the images you have created here.
Autumn is such a beautiful time.
Regards James
27th Oct 2024 00:17am
Thank you, autumn is my favorite season.
Greedy winter is on its way, to ravage us all, lol
Greedy winter is on its way, to ravage us all, lol
27th Oct 2024 1:39am
Brilliantly written, Debbie. Into the list it belongs. Appreciate you.
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27th Oct 2024 1:46am
I love your reviews! Seriously I appreciate you and your constant support.
Thank you for that.
Thank you for that.
27th Oct 2024 1:47am
29th Oct 2024 00:20am
A nice, aesthetical cataclysm of season's change. You bring to life the spirit of nature, found in your wonder of forest, color, and overall feel of environment. Seeking an answer, or perhaps just general validation found in relating to life cycle, seems to take you to another place entirely, in that you do a good job in describing your feelings and emotions in transition, along with the lucidity to what you share through simile and metaphor. In other words, your potential is very captivating to behold. The description here shows both human spirit, and nature in observation, and you do well in combining the two. I know this isn't exactly your most fluent or best piece, but you do hit home with your feelings, and I have confidence in your future ability to master your poetry. I look forward to reading more form you. Thanks for sharing!
29th Oct 2024 1:53am
Thank you for all that, it's so much appreciated. It keeps me confident, lol. I do know
how to take what I'm feeling and combine it with nature. It comes so easily to me. I'm
still waiting to sit down and write a masterpiece, in language and in meaning.
I'm under a tremendous amount of stress caring for my mom, I'm surprised I
can write at all. Thanks again for the wonderful feedback. Take care
how to take what I'm feeling and combine it with nature. It comes so easily to me. I'm
still waiting to sit down and write a masterpiece, in language and in meaning.
I'm under a tremendous amount of stress caring for my mom, I'm surprised I
can write at all. Thanks again for the wonderful feedback. Take care
