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Ravenous for my blood
Every night it calls me
Begging me to be its slave
And I come whole heartedly to its beautiful voice
In return for faithfulness it gives me hope and the will to be brave
It gives me life and pleasure, pain and anguish, rest and peace
It helps me to wake up from the deadly life ahead
Unsure of the road, it guides me
Begging me to be its slave
And I come whole heartedly to its beautiful voice
In return for faithfulness it gives me hope and the will to be brave
It gives me life and pleasure, pain and anguish, rest and peace
It helps me to wake up from the deadly life ahead
Unsure of the road, it guides me
Published 18th May 2012
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21st May 2012 10:53pm
hmm, maybe you could end it by having like an insite line for the last one. i see what you mean earlier about it cutting off. and maybe you could say:
It gives me life and pleasure, pain and anguish, rest and peace
It helps me to wake up and cease the deadly life ahead
Unsure of the road, it guides me.
that way the peace and cease rhyme and its not an out-right rhyme scheme, but it helps the subconious signal an end
It gives me life and pleasure, pain and anguish, rest and peace
It helps me to wake up and cease the deadly life ahead
Unsure of the road, it guides me.
that way the peace and cease rhyme and its not an out-right rhyme scheme, but it helps the subconious signal an end
