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The Storm
The Storm
The storm is my friend
You can't see me
The storm is my friend
The storm
The storm is not my friend
I can feel you
The storm will bring my end
The storm
The storm is my friend
You can't hear me
The storm is my friend
The storm
The storm never ends
I tried to reach you
I know this storm is my end
As I entered, the lighting crackle shelter me
The storm, the storm is my friend
As I climb the stairs, the thunder disguises me
The storm is my friend
Once inside my skin is on fire
Here comes my end
Once you climb the stairs, I perspire
My breathing will never come again
As I choke you awake
The storm is my friend
As I ravage your body
The storm is my friend
As you grip my throat
Your storm is my end
As you take unprovoked
Your storm never bends
As I yell words of pain
As you struggle to fight back
As we reach the end
The storm is our friend
I feel every lash of every syllable you spit
As I trash in your hold with no respite
Reaching the climax of lighting strike
The storm is our friend and it likes to bite
Both admitting in a used slump
There's an occasional need to give life a jump
From conversation on the phone to our brutal end
We both agree, "the storm is our friend
The storm is my friend
You can't see me
The storm is my friend
The storm
The storm is not my friend
I can feel you
The storm will bring my end
The storm
The storm is my friend
You can't hear me
The storm is my friend
The storm
The storm never ends
I tried to reach you
I know this storm is my end
As I entered, the lighting crackle shelter me
The storm, the storm is my friend
As I climb the stairs, the thunder disguises me
The storm is my friend
Once inside my skin is on fire
Here comes my end
Once you climb the stairs, I perspire
My breathing will never come again
As I choke you awake
The storm is my friend
As I ravage your body
The storm is my friend
As you grip my throat
Your storm is my end
As you take unprovoked
Your storm never bends
As I yell words of pain
As you struggle to fight back
As we reach the end
The storm is our friend
I feel every lash of every syllable you spit
As I trash in your hold with no respite
Reaching the climax of lighting strike
The storm is our friend and it likes to bite
Both admitting in a used slump
There's an occasional need to give life a jump
From conversation on the phone to our brutal end
We both agree, "the storm is our friend
Author's Note
This is inspired by I_is_Me poem the Storm. Thank you for allowing me to put my spin on it.
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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Re. The Storm
24th Oct 2024 00:01am
Just our feelings on the subject poetry just like music should flow from one source and through another. You have definitely done this poem justice with your twist on it. Really tight work Lady
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24th Oct 2024 00:15am
hello beautiful Fia I love the build and intensity here I could feel it in my soul... oddly enough some of the spirits call me windy... when my passion stirs sometimes also does the wind...this is excellent ❤️
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Re. The Storm
24th Oct 2024 12:08pm
Curious as I am, I looked up I_is_Me's piece - and this is awesome.
Great job, Fia, LOVE the stanzas you added 💕
Great job, Fia, LOVE the stanzas you added 💕
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Re: Re. The Storm
24th Oct 2024 12:19pm
Thank you. 😊 I'm pretty sure Me will appreciate to know you look at the original piece.
Your awesome.
Your awesome.
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Anonymous
24th Oct 2024 3:49pm
Great ink...simple words but deep meaning....i can sense the confusion in a relationship that it's trying to convey.
Good job👍
Good job👍
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24th Oct 2024 10:51pm
Greetings fia, how are you; very well written... Will want to go check I is me version... Wish it was longer, por que it is a good strong read, an wanted more of it... Take good care: deadwolf
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Re: Re. The Storm
24th Oct 2024 11:26pm
Hola, deadwolf.. I am sorry it could not be longer..It wrapped up nicely this way.
Gracias por comentar:))
Gracias por comentar:))
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25th Oct 2024 00:51am