Patricia

The bartender image is pretty dang effective. This is stunning. Really.

Patricia
glides in
stilletos (stilettos)
leaving a wake
of longing (SOOOO Cohen-esque. Lovely.)
that could be
captured in
tiny bottles
and hidden
in faraway
deserts
 
She embodies
indifference
aloofness
 
tantalizes like
a wild orchid
a pschedelic purple (psychedelic)  
with a hint of white
justbeyondreach
 
Patricia
shakes the drinks
really well
her cocktails are
the best in town
 
What joy to watch
her in action
 
primal-unfazed-distant
 
She undulates as
passion ovulates
in thorny balls (like a black widow)
way down the
spinal cord
 
Her face is flat
always
not even a scowl
like a Kaurismaki
character
 
She is
a go-getter
probably a mother
a scorned lover
who knows
 
She plays
Duke Ellington
Cole Porter
 
thanks when
tipped
 
She
never makes
exceptions
 
Tonight our eyes
met and I uncorked
a few bottles from
the desert (And you wrap it back to the first image. NICE!)
 
Its unbearable now
Murder it is (I think this line is redundant. Why don't you link up a little and grab the ticking time-bomb image with which you end, and foreshadow it here, instead of 'murder'... just a suggestion.)
 
I know that she
knows that I
know it all too well (OOOOOOoo, nice string!)
 
Every minute is
a dagger and every
gin and tonic
a bomb
which she hands out
non-chalant as ever (nonchalant, or was that on purpose?)
 
probably she knows
which wire to cut
damn woman (Nice ending!)

Again, Sumeet, this was simply stunning.

Betty

Can't thank you enough.:)
First for pointing out the typos.
And then saying the right things.

'Black widow' sure is fascinating. And what you
said about 'murder' made sense there. Rework.

You have been helpful. And lovely.:)

High five and innocent smiles(yup! They exist)

Sumeet

I was intrigued by this. Excellent write. :)

flowergirl

thank you for stopping by. glad it worked
for you. and you are very kind.:)

light,

sumeet