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Hermetic Breakdown (collab with Vision_of_insanity)
Here I sit alone and broken
My owner is annoyed
Windows won't even open
I lay dormant here, stranded in a church parking lot
Jesus won't help me
The ignition clicks, the engine is shot
Maybe it's time to meet that junk pile in the sky
If I had wings, I'd surely learn how to fly
Inside I die.
A slow demise.
A stuttered stop.
My purpose was forgot.
My owners empathy is unwise.
My detriment is no surprise.
The church is an empty lot.
There's no god that I've got.
Just brutal sun skies.
Scrutinizing eyes.
Avoiding the junkyard,
Where scrap metal cries.
My owner is annoyed
Windows won't even open
I lay dormant here, stranded in a church parking lot
Jesus won't help me
The ignition clicks, the engine is shot
Maybe it's time to meet that junk pile in the sky
If I had wings, I'd surely learn how to fly
Inside I die.
A slow demise.
A stuttered stop.
My purpose was forgot.
My owners empathy is unwise.
My detriment is no surprise.
The church is an empty lot.
There's no god that I've got.
Just brutal sun skies.
Scrutinizing eyes.
Avoiding the junkyard,
Where scrap metal cries.
Published 29th Sep 2024
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29th Sep 2024 4:22pm
Great work my friend. I always enjoy working with you. If you want to buy a new car, don't, I'll sell you my old jalopy.
29th Sep 2024 4:24pm
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29th Sep 2024 5:35pm
Okay you two this is brilliant. If I look at this in the surface it sounds like a car ready for the yards. But delving deeper into this one could say that the person is being brought to the end and the one they loved is abandoning them. You pray to the powers that be and still your end is coming close.
Love this. Fia oxoxo
Love this. Fia oxoxo
29th Sep 2024 5:39pm
Hahaha thanks alot for the detailed feedback. It is sad when you can't do the one job you're supposed to do. Wether that is keeping someone happy or just being a functioning machine. Thanks for stopping by!
29th Sep 2024 8:58pm
Switch to all electric and leave that Rube Goldberg internal combustion claptrap for the recyclers 🚗
Hmmmm. So you're a fan of all electric? Tell me why. Here or in a message. Idc
They can run on renewable power instead of fossil, which is harder for big corporations to commodify and price gouge.
Potential for off grid recharging.
They're quieter.
Superior drive train characteristics.
All of which makes them better for daily commuter trips, which is where most gasoline gets used, and so they help to run down the cost of gasoline for gas users via market competition.
Just don't get a Tesla, because Elon Musk is a POS.
Potential for off grid recharging.
They're quieter.
Superior drive train characteristics.
All of which makes them better for daily commuter trips, which is where most gasoline gets used, and so they help to run down the cost of gasoline for gas users via market competition.
Just don't get a Tesla, because Elon Musk is a POS.
30th Sep 2024 2:56am
Hahaha I seee. I've never looked into this topic so idk anything about it
30th Sep 2024 6:04am
2nd Oct 2024 1:45am
With time we all learn to escape and also how to open the door. This is a deep conversation, i liked it.
2nd Oct 2024 1:54am
