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Soft Rain
tap something touched me
tap warm and unintrusive
tap should I go on
Tap I should
It was as if I was being granted a secret kiss
Yet, all I saw as it landed on me was a drop
I did not shy away from this
Is it the exhibitionist in me
Or is it what I want so willingly
I did not run from the rain
Was one of the chosen few
I felt a sacred chain of soft restrain
Was wrapped in its scent
To keep me
I want to walk in the rain
tap warm and unintrusive
tap should I go on
Tap I should
It was as if I was being granted a secret kiss
Yet, all I saw as it landed on me was a drop
I did not shy away from this
Is it the exhibitionist in me
Or is it what I want so willingly
I did not run from the rain
Was one of the chosen few
I felt a sacred chain of soft restrain
Was wrapped in its scent
To keep me
I want to walk in the rain
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Re. Soft Rain
27th Sep 2024 7:19pm
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27th Sep 2024 8:01pm
Re. Soft Rain
27th Sep 2024 9:41pm
Despite S2's muddle of tenses and prosery there's an undeniable and endearing freshness to this which I'm sure would repay further effort if you persevered with it. All that ever lands on me is bird shit so you are indeed fortunate. Bravo.
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27th Sep 2024 9:55pm
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28th Sep 2024 00:08am
Being sensual requires a gentle touch,
perhaps in a similar style to this..
All I noticed was a drop
granting a secret kiss
and I could not shy away
I felt special
a link that trembled
within a sacred chain....
Poetry is a bit like conjuring to paint a picture
as opposed to the black and white word world of prose.
I think it's important you spend some time on this one.
as a delightful idea always brings rewards.
Best ~ Abra
....
perhaps in a similar style to this..
All I noticed was a drop
granting a secret kiss
and I could not shy away
I felt special
a link that trembled
within a sacred chain....
Poetry is a bit like conjuring to paint a picture
as opposed to the black and white word world of prose.
I think it's important you spend some time on this one.
as a delightful idea always brings rewards.
Best ~ Abra
....
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28th Sep 2024 00:44am
Re. Soft Rain
27th Sep 2024 10:45pm
This has a softness and a gentleness to it that’s rare in erotic poems on this site. I like it.
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27th Sep 2024 11:07pm
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27th Sep 2024 11:08pm
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27th Sep 2024 11:08pm
Re. Soft Rain
Anonymous
28th Sep 2024 1:04am
Rain is great. If we were to count how many poems have been dedicated to it. we would need a really big wherehouse. lol
I like your take on it very much.
I like your take on it very much.
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28th Sep 2024 1:05am
Re. Soft Rain
28th Sep 2024 2:08am
"Is it the exhibitionist in me
Or is it what I want so willingly"
You go, Fia. Do your thing. Great write. Appreciate you.
DL
Or is it what I want so willingly"
You go, Fia. Do your thing. Great write. Appreciate you.
DL
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28th Sep 2024 2:09am
Re. Soft Rain
28th Sep 2024 9:44am
There's something so magical about walking in the rain. Love the soft vibe of this write 💕
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28th Sep 2024 10:06am
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Re. Soft Rain
28th Sep 2024 6:46pm
I can smell the mist of your monsoon. Soft , smoothy and creamy ❤️ well composed.
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28th Sep 2024 7:00pm