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So nothing then?
I'm going to smash you into pieces.
Eat your tiny heart.
I don't understand why you look like
you think you're smart.
Hiding all the damages.
Dressing to restart.
Please do comprehend the reasons
I tore you apart.
not that you were fragile.
not that you were weak.
It's because in you I saw a challenge quite unique.
The measure of your reason.
The tempo of your rhyme.
Harmonic synchronicity
mirroring sublime.
Your mind is like no other.
Such vast complexities.
A sure thing I can promise but there are no guarantees.
People aren't a question.
People are but need.
The substance of survival
floods necessity.
Eat your tiny heart.
I don't understand why you look like
you think you're smart.
Hiding all the damages.
Dressing to restart.
Please do comprehend the reasons
I tore you apart.
not that you were fragile.
not that you were weak.
It's because in you I saw a challenge quite unique.
The measure of your reason.
The tempo of your rhyme.
Harmonic synchronicity
mirroring sublime.
Your mind is like no other.
Such vast complexities.
A sure thing I can promise but there are no guarantees.
People aren't a question.
People are but need.
The substance of survival
floods necessity.
Published 18th Aug 2024
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18th Aug 2024 11:52pm
Damn! This is a great poem my friend. The delivery & rhymes are infectious. Nicely executed.
20th Aug 2024 1:40pm
Thank you.
I made it as a song on that Suno site, It's posted in the music thread.
There are two versions but I posted the one I liked more.
I made it as a song on that Suno site, It's posted in the music thread.
There are two versions but I posted the one I liked more.
27th Aug 2024 5:23am
27th Aug 2024 6:45am
I like the delivery of the rhyme scheme. Has a nice flow to it. There is a lot of anger built upon up in this. People take others for granted and become ignorant. Some see it, some don't. Those that don't, or grow into not seeing, think they can mess around with people that do see it, and continue to take it for granted. This can lead to vanity or selfishness, while there should be mutuality and sacrifice. A lot of frustration and impatience to endure this. Anyway, I also enjoyed some of the compare/contrast conceptualization, and how you used it. The "mirror" stanza as probably my favorite to this. Thanks for sharing!
3rd Sep 2024 12:16pm
Thank you for the feedback.
I was thinking about a couple of the people that were in my life (both way smarter than I).
I actually wrote these as lyrics to some crappy song I generated with Suno
https://suno.com/song/b811522c-d5a1-44bc-91b6-dcf13484c07d
I was thinking about a couple of the people that were in my life (both way smarter than I).
I actually wrote these as lyrics to some crappy song I generated with Suno
https://suno.com/song/b811522c-d5a1-44bc-91b6-dcf13484c07d
8th Oct 2024 3:29am
8th Oct 2024 3:41am
That's definitely one of the nicest things anyone's ever said to me.
Thank you.
Thank you.
