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Final Viewing
Next, have a seat here on your casket and tell me how you're doing
Relax yourself with rigor mortis as I prepare you for the viewing
That ashen look will disappear with just a few tweaks
I may have to break your jawbone to help you speak
I'll use curling irons of hell's fire to revive your hair
I'll fill in the bald spots yes I can put hair back anywhere
Just watch as my nimble little fingers move along here and there
Watch as I add back your life's color as if out of thin air
I have rice flour to add color and replace flaking skin
A little rouge is what I'll use to add a little sin
Yes it's good that you have pouty lips let me paint them red
Believe me you have forever and a day to resemble the dead
Let's just get past this viewing, when I'm finished you can lie down
While your coffin is open please remember not to move around
Just lie there and allow them to marvel at all the work that I did
The stab wounds and strangulation prints have all been hid
So take one last look at yourself in this mirror before becoming my wife
You became Persephone to my Hades thanks to your killer's knife
In time you will in doubt look just like Me
But to achieve this level of beauty could take you an eternity
Relax yourself with rigor mortis as I prepare you for the viewing
That ashen look will disappear with just a few tweaks
I may have to break your jawbone to help you speak
I'll use curling irons of hell's fire to revive your hair
I'll fill in the bald spots yes I can put hair back anywhere
Just watch as my nimble little fingers move along here and there
Watch as I add back your life's color as if out of thin air
I have rice flour to add color and replace flaking skin
A little rouge is what I'll use to add a little sin
Yes it's good that you have pouty lips let me paint them red
Believe me you have forever and a day to resemble the dead
Let's just get past this viewing, when I'm finished you can lie down
While your coffin is open please remember not to move around
Just lie there and allow them to marvel at all the work that I did
The stab wounds and strangulation prints have all been hid
So take one last look at yourself in this mirror before becoming my wife
You became Persephone to my Hades thanks to your killer's knife
In time you will in doubt look just like Me
But to achieve this level of beauty could take you an eternity
Written by
I_IS_ME
Published 18th Aug 2024
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Re. Final Viewing
18th Aug 2024 5:50am
I appreciate your thoughts on this message of the final viewing for I truly enjoy your story teller ✍️ I must say with respect to you as well as I see your style has change as well as you bring your readers into there own thoughts in mind and imagination from beginning to end 🙏👍💯.
STONEY 223 🪬 SHAMAN 🪬
STONEY 223 🪬 SHAMAN 🪬
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Re: Re. Final Viewing
18th Aug 2024 5:57am
We like switching stuff up here and there trying not to get bored with poetry again. But thanks for all your feedback dude
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18th Aug 2024 6:10am
Respect and thank you for sharing your talent as a writer of words ✍️🙏🪬 SHAMAN 🪬
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Re. Final Viewing
18th Aug 2024 5:55am
Awesome. Reminds me of the video from Avenged Sevenfold - A Little Piece Of Heaven. Great imagery!
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18th Aug 2024 6:15am
There's a comp we think by Trome that is using this pic for inspiration. Thanks a ton Lady for reading and commenting on this piece, much appreciation
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18th Aug 2024 6:24am
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18th Aug 2024 7:19pm
We don't do it for the comp it's pushing ourself to create something simply based on the pic. Thank you for reading and commenting, much appreciation Lady
Re. Final Viewing
18th Aug 2024 1:17pm
Me I can see you getting the body together for the viewing. Very nice piece. Good luck Fia xoxo
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Re: Re. Final Viewing
18th Aug 2024 7:25pm
We originally had intentions of getting a little more graphic but decided against it, But thank you as always for your support, you're appreciated
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18th Aug 2024 7:28pm
Re. Final Viewing
21st Aug 2024 5:26pm
This reminds me of Clive Barker's Hell Raiser. {The 1st one }
A Hellish romance indeed.
Great writing
Naaj
A Hellish romance indeed.
Great writing
Naaj
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21st Aug 2024 5:31pm
What's up dude, thanks for one heck of a compliment we really appreciate your comment
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21st Aug 2024 6:07pm
What's up my brother/poet.
This was one the most highly conceptual poems I've read in a while.
Took me back to some of those pleasant dark spaces.
Masterfully executed!!
This was one the most highly conceptual poems I've read in a while.
Took me back to some of those pleasant dark spaces.
Masterfully executed!!
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21st Aug 2024 6:09pm
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12th Sep 2024 12:01pm
We did it for a comp and never even checked on the freaking thing. It was just good to write something. Thanks dude
Re. Final Viewing
21st Sep 2024 11:56pm
Welp, this reminds me of that series called Six Feet Under.
Loved all the dark twisted romance in this. hahaha
Killer write amigo:)
Loved all the dark twisted romance in this. hahaha
Killer write amigo:)
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22nd Sep 2024 00:17am
It was for a comp and we honestly don't know what happened to the comp. We entered three and we think that two disappeared for whatever reason. But it was fun to write off of someone else's idea. Thanks Lady