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Defiant
.you defeat mE
.stresS
.mE
.ouT
.so defianT
. .without a doubT
.not the samE
.not even closE
.you're my paiN
.
.why I overdosE
.you're the braiN
.inside my skulL
.can't cross the bridgE
.you're just a trolL
.you weaken mE
.i am a fooL
.you're laws makeshifT
.they're always crueL
.mischievous you arE
.all the timE
.i love to have yoU
.anD
.calL
.yoU
.minE
.stresS
.mE
.ouT
.so defianT
. .without a doubT
.not the samE
.not even closE
.you're my paiN
.
.why I overdosE
.you're the braiN
.inside my skulL
.can't cross the bridgE
.you're just a trolL
.you weaken mE
.i am a fooL
.you're laws makeshifT
.they're always crueL
.mischievous you arE
.all the timE
.i love to have yoU
.anD
.calL
.yoU
.minE
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Re. Defiant
23rd Jul 2024 7:23pm
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24th Jul 2024 6:11pm
love the fragmented, erratic format here. really good piece of abstract art.
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Re. Defiant
27th Jul 2024 2:12am
This was a wicked twist on word play. At one point it like no but it's really a yes. Love this. Fia xoxo
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30th Jul 2024 5:19am
At least they're on your mind. I'm guessing that is part of the attraction here.
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30th Jul 2024 7:06am
Haha that's true. It's about my daughter. Children are a pain but you love them!
Re. Defiant
2nd Aug 2024 2:54pm
At first I looked for an acrostic in the succession of capitalized letters, to no avail, of course. Still, a great poem, the jagged flow somehow makes it even more effective. Good job.
Mundus
Mundus
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2nd Aug 2024 3:01pm
Thank you! I was thinking of doing that but would be virtually impossible to rhyme and produce a word or even a message.