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Seduction's Sonnet
My pet, please let the whisper of my mouth
caress your neck where pulse beats out my name.
This lover’s liquid residue flows south,
a tongue of sweet saliva to your flame.
A sparkling ribbon glistens like a tear
down chest and belly’s saturated sheen.
It leads to where your tangled curls appear
like waves of ocean emptied from a stream.
Let mighty tides ingest our fiery urge.
Let molten lava spatter on the shore.
Your mountain spews a fountain from the surge
of native drums we pound as if at war.
Come paint my peachy petals creamy white
and kiss my soft surrender to the night.
(Shakespearian Sonnet)
Iambic Pentameter
Published 14th May 2024
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14th May 2024 3:49am
You should be winning awards with these poems you're putting out. Iambic Pentameter isn't easy but using it in a sonnet seems even harder to me.
Great poem.
Great poem.
14th May 2024 4:03am
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14th May 2024 5:34am
I don’t think Shakespeare would approve of you using his meter like this…. come to think of it he will probably drop on his knees and kiss your feet … I certainly did.. a long time ago
14th May 2024 5:45am
14th May 2024 6:04am
What an awesome write this is. Sonnets are far from easy, but you nailed it.
Your "pet" made me smile, it's always nice to meet a fellow kinksters here.
...I'm definitely going to read more of your work...
P.S. that's one steamy hot image (drools a little)
Your "pet" made me smile, it's always nice to meet a fellow kinksters here.
...I'm definitely going to read more of your work...
P.S. that's one steamy hot image (drools a little)
15th May 2024 11:52pm
So awesome for you to say, Duende! I love your comment, and I'm definitely a fellow kinkster!
A hearty Shakespeareian romp. Favourite verse (for its uninhibitedly dramatic turn of phrase):
Let mighty tides ingest our fiery urge.
Let molten lava spatter on the shore.
Your mountain spews a fountain from the surge
of native drums we pound as if at war.
Picture could be scene from a screen version of his play Othello (O with Desdemona).
Let mighty tides ingest our fiery urge.
Let molten lava spatter on the shore.
Your mountain spews a fountain from the surge
of native drums we pound as if at war.
Picture could be scene from a screen version of his play Othello (O with Desdemona).
15th May 2024 11:54pm
Wow, I love your comments and how you point out your favorite parts! Thanks!
14th May 2024 6:09am
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14th May 2024 6:36am
'' Your mountain spews a fountain from the surge
of native drums we pound as if at war.''
whew!! this was intense imagery indeed
enjoyed the journey.
much respect.
Naaj
of native drums we pound as if at war.''
whew!! this was intense imagery indeed
enjoyed the journey.
much respect.
Naaj
16th May 2024 00:02am
Naaj, thanks so much for dropping by and reading. I love your comment, and thanks for pointing out your favorite part. I really like that!
Meg
xoxo
Meg
xoxo
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23rd May 2024 3:54am
I'm so glad you like, and thanks for the comment?
I've never been compared to a summer's day, actually
I've never been compared to a summer's day, actually
