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The Human Hourglass
how much dust are we
an accumulation of experiences
shifting listlessly down
drowning...dreaming from
birth to death & whatever time lies in between
isms and possibilities
measured by our moments only
mirroring hopes of true transcendence
achievements are merely a bonus
in the grand scheme of things
icing on the perfect cake
maybe the muse of a condensed lifetime
so long as we don't idle
on that human hamster wheel
letting it overbake
putting the call on hold
gravity falls & we're meant to rise
beyond the sight of eyes
yet here we go
the migrating redundant ones
living the constant slide
three steps forward...four steps back
eyes focused on the wrong things
funneled through a haze of familiar future-past tunnels
unable to see the glass constraining our ass
warped in hues of Deja vu
like a time capsule
the rapture engulfs us again and again
we're captured by life
our quintessence filtered at crossroads
seconds dropping slowly away
strained through the pains of humanity
until we're sucked through the drain
narrowing thoughts
all of those somethings sought
all those endless self righteous fights fought
no more than items on a list
deeded and documented as
grains of our sand fading to dust
when every fragment has finally fallen...what's left
except that which is bereft of imagination
Published 19th Feb 2024
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19th Feb 2024 6:46am
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21st Feb 2024 3:10am
This is freaking awesome!
Really great piece Confluence.
So many stunning visuals and metaphors.
Really great piece Confluence.
So many stunning visuals and metaphors.
23rd Feb 2024 00:02am
29th Feb 2024 3:14am
Excellent. You're on my faves list for a good reason. Always a guaranteed solid, interesting write. Thank you for rewarding me/us with great material. Keep this up.
29th Feb 2024 5:58am
Thank you Styxian for sharing such eloquent thoughts.
Your poetic uniqueness is inspiring as well.
I will definitely be cruising through your pages soon enough
Your poetic uniqueness is inspiring as well.
I will definitely be cruising through your pages soon enough
Anonymous
29th Feb 2024 3:18pm
Hello there.
I liked that this has zero punctuation, adding to that idea that time flows, just like the words in this observation.
The opener is also stunning. I stopped after the first phrase because I was like… all that spiel of ashes to ashes and dust to dust, that yeah, maybe we are part timer. Part death. Not to mention, how many dead bodies do you think we’ve randomly sucked in mid air from all these ash scatterings that have taken place… I went off on a tangent, but I like things that make me think.
Lyrically, it’s written and expressed beautifully. I think it was a really wonderful job on this and the thoughts contained within it.
Thanks for sharing.
-M
I liked that this has zero punctuation, adding to that idea that time flows, just like the words in this observation.
The opener is also stunning. I stopped after the first phrase because I was like… all that spiel of ashes to ashes and dust to dust, that yeah, maybe we are part timer. Part death. Not to mention, how many dead bodies do you think we’ve randomly sucked in mid air from all these ash scatterings that have taken place… I went off on a tangent, but I like things that make me think.
Lyrically, it’s written and expressed beautifully. I think it was a really wonderful job on this and the thoughts contained within it.
Thanks for sharing.
-M
29th Feb 2024 4:39pm
Thank you for such a great comment! The tangent you rolled out on put the mind to work. Hadn't thought of that but will definitely be thinking about it now!
