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inadvertence; rewind
make no mistake
my palms still sweat
remembering
the way your
throat tastes
we got to the part
I rode your face
like a reset button
just to feel
(anything)
alive
and I almost
felt
good
watching you
get away ...
but hope is
for pussies
and dead girls
don't feel
past the
empty ache
in their
everywhere
but
make
no
mistake
my palms still sweat
remembering
the way your
throat tastes
like me
Published 7th Feb 2024
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7th Feb 2024 3:41am
Righteous
Like
Lotta feeling in not too many words.
That's poetry at its best
Like
Lotta feeling in not too many words.
That's poetry at its best
13th Feb 2024 10:43pm
hello beautiful Betty hope is for dead girls I love that line this is full of power and great need I can taste you too 💕
13th Feb 2024 10:43pm
7th Feb 2024 4:25am
Netsuke carving.
Sometimes the best way, The Bet' Way, is the direct route.
Sometimes the best way, The Bet' Way, is the direct route.
13th Feb 2024 10:43pm
7th Feb 2024 9:59am
As usual, blown away.
I loved how you repeated the first stanza near the end and that last line? Amazing impact. I agree with PS, so much said in a short poem. You capture the primal need in wanting to recapture romance and lust perfectly with word choices (obviously) and your unique formatting.
Girl, I can never get enough. You write what we all feel or have felt with such ferocity and exactly the way it FEELS. A unique gift and I’m thankful you can put into poetry what so many of us have gone through. Your work heals.
I loved how you repeated the first stanza near the end and that last line? Amazing impact. I agree with PS, so much said in a short poem. You capture the primal need in wanting to recapture romance and lust perfectly with word choices (obviously) and your unique formatting.
Girl, I can never get enough. You write what we all feel or have felt with such ferocity and exactly the way it FEELS. A unique gift and I’m thankful you can put into poetry what so many of us have gone through. Your work heals.
13th Feb 2024 10:44pm
7th Feb 2024 12:00pm
The design of your poem is really done well, circling the emotion back around to capture us all once again. Really strong writing!
13th Feb 2024 10:44pm
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7th Feb 2024 5:46pm
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13th Feb 2024 10:44pm
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13th Feb 2024 10:45pm
8th Feb 2024 5:24am
Dear B,
You write heartache within lust like nobody’s business. That yearning next to loss and need is powerfully potent.
Makes my heart do something which is more than it’s done in ages. Outstanding write. H🌷
You write heartache within lust like nobody’s business. That yearning next to loss and need is powerfully potent.
Makes my heart do something which is more than it’s done in ages. Outstanding write. H🌷
13th Feb 2024 10:45pm
