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Taciturn Lover
I confessed my secrets to the moon.
I spoke them softly as pages turn
in a book, their words overlapping on top
of one another, the way two lovers
whisper in each others ears. Lips tickling
with a trail of shivers left behind hot breath
on pale milky skin bathed in the moon's glow.
Leaves rustle excitedly as they listen
to the susurrus of the wind passing.
Crickets rub their lace wings together
in syncopation with the cicada’s tymbal.
Shutter bugs burst in animated flurry
of gold and amber flashes
as they watch my taciturn lover and I
slip away beneath a blanket of fog.
I spoke them softly as pages turn
in a book, their words overlapping on top
of one another, the way two lovers
whisper in each others ears. Lips tickling
with a trail of shivers left behind hot breath
on pale milky skin bathed in the moon's glow.
Leaves rustle excitedly as they listen
to the susurrus of the wind passing.
Crickets rub their lace wings together
in syncopation with the cicada’s tymbal.
Shutter bugs burst in animated flurry
of gold and amber flashes
as they watch my taciturn lover and I
slip away beneath a blanket of fog.
Published 10th Jan 2024
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10th Jan 2024 5:57am
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10th Jan 2024 2:15pm
WOW! A great flow and use of metaphors. Looking forward to more of your poetry. Hugs and peace,Oral
10th Jan 2024 10:30pm
Your vocabulary is titillating, e.g., susurrus and tymbal, I speak Spanish and susurro is whisper...I'd never seen its English use...coolio🤩 This passage is a head-ta-toe tingler,
"Lips tickling
with a trail of shivers left behind hot breath
on pale milky skin bathed in the moon's glow. "
Bravissima!
"Lips tickling
with a trail of shivers left behind hot breath
on pale milky skin bathed in the moon's glow. "
Bravissima!
27th Feb 2024 1:01am
Enjoyed these vivid descriptions and emotions evolving beyond a metaphor that encompasses a passion for the night.
Great stuff.
Great stuff.
