Posting Here is Silly

 
OK, I don't always disagree, but it's because we live in a candy-ass culture of assbags who can't take a punch, and who use AI to correct spelling. Let's see if you're one of them.  
 
Here's feedback: Your meter is trash, friend. It's all over the place.  There's no flow in the poem, and the lack of white space is intimidating.  
 
You present a text blob without any nuances for articulation, either through your form or your force of writing. The passion is meh. The message is bashing without the necessary rage required to bash your audience.    
 
For the best metered poems -- retro Loudmouth, anything by Midnight Sonneteer. There are a few others, but I tend to avoid rhyming poem like the plague because it's either shitty form or boring linguistics. You have to be ON it to do both. You have to be linguistically dexterous and stylistically amazing to capture the attention of a TikTok audience. Or break it up into free form.  
 
The syllable count -- your meter, is posted next to the line. A formed poem is a song to seduce your reader.  
 
POSTING HERE SILLY  
Where art survives conversational buzz is alive --13  
Sharing both knowledge and experience are tools necessary for art to thrive --20  
But a poem posted on this fake site is doomed to die -- 13  
Members never comment and yet there is no outcry --13  
Apathy,Lazy, ? This selfish behavior won’t relent-- 14  
6 of 606 that read my poems and that’s less than one percent have offered any opinion to present. You all should be embarrassed acting just like uneducated fools, you diminish the art and tarnish all Poets, your clueless actions border on cruel.  -- 66  
 
Dude. You should be embarrassed by the lack of structured meter and rhyme.  
 
Oh, as far as an uneducated fools go, you may call me Dr. Betty.    
 
As to your gross hypocrisy: You're whining and bitching about reviews, but you've given fewer than 40. How the fuck do you expect to get what you won't give? You want reviews? Give five for every one you receive. Be as honest as you want people to be with you. Give a review to every person who reviews you. Get out there. Read. Read. Read. Find forms that resonate with you. Offer discourse and evolve with it. Grow as a reader and develop a community from which to build your audience.  
 
One percent is what we get. The art is made in what we do with that.  
 
What are you going to do with it?  
 

I know you’re right. It’s a fake poem written in 45 seconds designed to indicate personal disdain wondering if clumsy insults would elicit response.  This is the third time I’ve posted this same diatribe using slightly different titles to escape the duplicate sensor. Your response is the very first and the only one. I have pieces posted that mostly are honoring phrase that satisfy your excellent critique though I listen to Thelonious Monk and have come to appreciate a little playful irreverence that elevates a certain artistic discord and will often rewrite a standard meter that purposely strays a  bit. Jazz is my first artistic love and incorporating improvisational aspects is fun and requires purposed thought. I don’t disagree with any that you said about the piece in question , though,  if I may politely state that an intelligent critique that you have proffered might have also been best served if the quick peek at my body of work I now hope you scout, could have served to add depth and insight to your communique ?  There is no right or wrong here but please know the short comings you note were an actual plan. Thank you for your time and effort.

First: there is no structure in your reply. You didn't use freakin' paragraphs, man.

Sure. Hit me up with your favorite piece. Link it here. After you leave feedback on 10 poems that have no feedback. I'll dance all over it.