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Enola Gay
I hurl myself at you
like a fucking aerial bomber
on a kamikaze mission,
uncaring in the moment
if we both blow the fuck up
I drag you to the ground
screaming
no
against your lips as we
kneel and our noses mash
as my sobs spill past
my lashes
We’re in a hero pose
as the shrapnel rains on us,
I hit your pecs with the meaty
parts of my fists
choking
no
with each strike
and you try to take
me in your arms and
whisper shhhh against
my head but not this time.
There isn’t any fucking comfort
past the taste of you soaked
in my regret
The heavy shadow over our head
turns and I watch saltwater
stain my lap
as you hold my hands,
hold my heart,
and say beautifully
scarred things
past the syncopation
of my deaf ears
no.
no.
There’s no rage, no fear just
the best parts of us walking
away with my blessing
forever this time
No.
Fucking. No!
I can’t. I can’t. You’re fucking
everything good, and dark and
passionate and insane and you can
talk me down from a 30 foot ledge
and how can you go after everything
and how can I let you?
No.
Please. No.
(Please. )
I wrench my hands from yours
and pull you to me,
needing something
primordial,
my hands shake
under your shirt,
and I crawl into your lap
somehow crying harder
as your skin
presses against
mine
Your hands wind
into my scalp.
Your mouth takes mine,
and the heavy shadow
turns slowly and aims true
The last ordinance,
the one that’s going
to take us out
flares into view
My head falls back
as you lick pain from
my throat and I
whimper
yes
as the sky
lights up in
atomic white
and the last
breath I take
before it
flashes our
shadow to the ground
has a molecule of your exhale
to hold forever
and it’s enough…
it’s enough
And it’s never enough.
like a fucking aerial bomber
on a kamikaze mission,
uncaring in the moment
if we both blow the fuck up
I drag you to the ground
screaming
no
against your lips as we
kneel and our noses mash
as my sobs spill past
my lashes
We’re in a hero pose
as the shrapnel rains on us,
I hit your pecs with the meaty
parts of my fists
choking
no
with each strike
and you try to take
me in your arms and
whisper shhhh against
my head but not this time.
There isn’t any fucking comfort
past the taste of you soaked
in my regret
The heavy shadow over our head
turns and I watch saltwater
stain my lap
as you hold my hands,
hold my heart,
and say beautifully
scarred things
past the syncopation
of my deaf ears
no.
no.
There’s no rage, no fear just
the best parts of us walking
away with my blessing
forever this time
No.
Fucking. No!
I can’t. I can’t. You’re fucking
everything good, and dark and
passionate and insane and you can
talk me down from a 30 foot ledge
and how can you go after everything
and how can I let you?
No.
Please. No.
(Please. )
I wrench my hands from yours
and pull you to me,
needing something
primordial,
my hands shake
under your shirt,
and I crawl into your lap
somehow crying harder
as your skin
presses against
mine
Your hands wind
into my scalp.
Your mouth takes mine,
and the heavy shadow
turns slowly and aims true
The last ordinance,
the one that’s going
to take us out
flares into view
My head falls back
as you lick pain from
my throat and I
whimper
yes
as the sky
lights up in
atomic white
and the last
breath I take
before it
flashes our
shadow to the ground
has a molecule of your exhale
to hold forever
and it’s enough…
it’s enough
And it’s never enough.
Written by
Betty
Published 23rd Dec 2023
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Re. Enola Gay
23rd Dec 2023 3:37pm
By far one of the best you've ever written.
That concept is so true - it's enough, it's never enough. And the image of the white atomic sky - wow!
Blew me away......
That concept is so true - it's enough, it's never enough. And the image of the white atomic sky - wow!
Blew me away......
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23rd Dec 2023 3:54pm
Re. Enola Gay
23rd Dec 2023 3:50pm
I wonder what it would be to like to live with you ?
What kind of insurance would you need ?
BIG
REALLY BIG
LIKE
What kind of insurance would you need ?
BIG
REALLY BIG
LIKE
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Re: Re. Enola Gay
23rd Dec 2023 3:59pm
I have policies for: Flood, fire, hurricane, tornado, earthquake, sinkhole, wind, poltergeist, spontaneous combustion, and pirate attack
Thanks.
Thanks.
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23rd Dec 2023 4:01pm
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23rd Dec 2023 7:46pm
It was cheap. Then the adjuster saw my bedroom and realized spontaneous combustion was possible …. And now it’s so expensive that I’d be better off buying a new house with that deductible. 😇
Re. Enola Gay
23rd Dec 2023 4:32pm
it would never be enough the power in that statement is deafening
every moment in fulfilling that need wow...with the aching pain you would need more
I love you...you are a true feeling artist...I understand this passion it's what fuels me...
here's a song for you...
I agree with Delia this is one of your best...you captured that desire here...
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=q78VlDiWDKI
every moment in fulfilling that need wow...with the aching pain you would need more
I love you...you are a true feeling artist...I understand this passion it's what fuels me...
here's a song for you...
I agree with Delia this is one of your best...you captured that desire here...
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=q78VlDiWDKI
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23rd Dec 2023 7:46pm
Re. Enola Gay
23rd Dec 2023 6:25pm
Your heart is a lightning storm that illuminates thunderous emotions that rain torrential truths.
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My heart is the sea at night during that lightning storm, and I can’t tell if I’ll drown or wait out the storm.
Thank you for the read.
Thank you for the read.
Re. Enola Gay
23rd Dec 2023 7:24pm
We don't know why we get the feeling of if we can't have you then no one can. Hahaha, this is when someone really finds that place, their place, in your very existence. This place can only be held by one, for of the many stars there's only one that's mine until that one burns out. Tight work Lady
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Re: Re. Enola Gay
23rd Dec 2023 7:49pm
There can be only one place.
I think cementing the place up and building a Chick Fil A on top of where love once lived would be cool.
Thank you my friend, I appreciate you.
I think cementing the place up and building a Chick Fil A on top of where love once lived would be cool.
Thank you my friend, I appreciate you.
Re. Enola Gay
23rd Dec 2023 7:36pm
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It does seem that way. Love is a terrible thing. Perhaps the worst thing you could do to another.
Thank you.
Thank you.
Re. Enola Gay
23rd Dec 2023 9:09pm
Staying off the radar like a bomber on the run
Do another lap around the target just for fun
Stayin' quiet, keeping calm until I find the one
Feel the wave wash over me when the deed is done
So peel it off, pull 'em down
Let me see it, turn around
Just lay back and let it happen
And remember to breathe
Your opening lines reminds me of remember to breathe by Sturgil Simpson
Do another lap around the target just for fun
Stayin' quiet, keeping calm until I find the one
Feel the wave wash over me when the deed is done
So peel it off, pull 'em down
Let me see it, turn around
Just lay back and let it happen
And remember to breathe
Your opening lines reminds me of remember to breathe by Sturgil Simpson
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Re: Re. Enola Gay
23rd Dec 2023 9:13pm
I’d never heard it and now it’s in my Pandora mix with the Transiberian Orchestra. Kickass tune, and kickass connection.
Thank you my friend
Thank you my friend
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23rd Dec 2023 9:50pm
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Anonymous
23rd Dec 2023 9:31pm
I really want to give this poem a commentary, and I want to because that’s what I do. But there’s another part of myself that just wants so badly for this to breathe. By itself. For itself. Occasionally that’s the best thing I can do to show it the respect it deserves.
Allow it all, darling. Allow it all
Allow it all, darling. Allow it all
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Re: Re. Enola Gay
26th Dec 2023 4:31pm
Thank you.
Letting go is agony. I’d rather tuck it all inside and let it fester. That sort of internal rotting can be muted with booze, and distraction, and dicks, but the way letting go is such a clean and all-encompassing pain that leaves you with phantom itches… ugh. Fuck!
Thank you my friend. I value you.
Letting go is agony. I’d rather tuck it all inside and let it fester. That sort of internal rotting can be muted with booze, and distraction, and dicks, but the way letting go is such a clean and all-encompassing pain that leaves you with phantom itches… ugh. Fuck!
Thank you my friend. I value you.
Re. Enola Gay
23rd Dec 2023 11:56pm
You know those old B17 bombers that the crews would put (usually) a pic of a woman near the nose, etc? Well you missed that time period. But your avatar would be on a current A10.
It's a tank buster, btw.
You write like wildcats mate. Perhaps that's the whole point of having nine lives. There will be sacrifices. I'm not one to pinpoint lines to highlight. Not when it's basically rewriting what I just read.
You're a hurricane. Yet everyone willingly approaches. The deaths of love never read so glorious.
It's a tank buster, btw.
You write like wildcats mate. Perhaps that's the whole point of having nine lives. There will be sacrifices. I'm not one to pinpoint lines to highlight. Not when it's basically rewriting what I just read.
You're a hurricane. Yet everyone willingly approaches. The deaths of love never read so glorious.
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26th Dec 2023 4:34pm
Styx, my brother from another mother, you show up with that rapier-sharp insight and kick me in the butt every damn time.
I write like wildcats mate. Omg. That’s genius. That’s going in the list of review lines I’m stealing for future work.
Hey… thank you. I live for poor choices. It’s the Central Florida in me.
I write like wildcats mate. Omg. That’s genius. That’s going in the list of review lines I’m stealing for future work.
Hey… thank you. I live for poor choices. It’s the Central Florida in me.
Re. Enola Gay
24th Dec 2023 3:49am
Dear B,
This made me wild for a passion this intense. The kind where you can’t breathe unless he’s right there and when he’s not there’s no oxygen. The pain written in this was piercing. Made me think of two major breakups I had that nearly flattened me. You are a monster writer. (That’s a compliment. I heard some kids using that as an expression of awe. I’m hip like that 🤦🏻♀️)
Fabulous writing although I’m very sorry for the pain. H🌷
This made me wild for a passion this intense. The kind where you can’t breathe unless he’s right there and when he’s not there’s no oxygen. The pain written in this was piercing. Made me think of two major breakups I had that nearly flattened me. You are a monster writer. (That’s a compliment. I heard some kids using that as an expression of awe. I’m hip like that 🤦🏻♀️)
Fabulous writing although I’m very sorry for the pain. H🌷
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Re: Re. Enola Gay
26th Dec 2023 4:36pm
I don’t know if it ever going to be all the way out of my system. The passion. Fuck. It was good. And there’s that fucked up reminder every time I see him. Of how good it was. Just… fuck.
You are a monster reviewer, babe, and I love your hip ass.
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24th Dec 2023 10:17pm
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25th Dec 2023 3:26pm
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26th Dec 2023 4:36pm
Re. Enola Gay
30th Dec 2023 7:35pm
I agree with Debbie, one of your best.
Your raw self awareness never ceases to amaze me.
I feel like my eyes catch fire every time I read you. Your poetry is my daily fix.
Keep doing you. Adjust your crown for nobody.
Your raw self awareness never ceases to amaze me.
I feel like my eyes catch fire every time I read you. Your poetry is my daily fix.
Keep doing you. Adjust your crown for nobody.
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Re: Re. Enola Gay
30th Dec 2023 8:04pm
This really humbled me. I respect you as an artist, and a human with depth and character, and to have you say kind things like this is amazing.
Thank you my friend.
Thank you my friend.
Re: Re. Enola Gay
30th Dec 2023 8:08pm
Thank you, Betty.
We are both deserving of every good thing life has to offer.
Sisters in sin and sacrifice who know a thing or two about what it’s like to be unashamed of how we feel. I have immense respect for the person you are.
And now there’s way too much love in the room and my mascara is smearing ….
We are both deserving of every good thing life has to offer.
Sisters in sin and sacrifice who know a thing or two about what it’s like to be unashamed of how we feel. I have immense respect for the person you are.
And now there’s way too much love in the room and my mascara is smearing ….
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Re. Enola Gay
Right-o. However, no one remembers the plane which dropped Fat Boy on Nagasaki, nor my father who arrived but days later to bivouac there in the radioactive dust of Nagagagagasaki. He would have been twenty, and he came away from that with his interior geiger counter going fuckfuckfuckfuck.. Eventually his lungs fell apart and for the last five years of his life he was on oxygen. He died of radiation poisoning a month before his 60th birthday, never knowing of my existence.
He would have loved this poem, I suspect . He might have spoken of rubble heaped like jenga sculpture, twisted gouty veins of metal, and...jeez. Nobody ever writes about this stuff. Glad you did.
The plane was "Bockscar," sometimes referred to as "Box Car" which I prefer. "Boxcar Blues" for my father, glowing in the dark, with an appointment to Annapolis but who turned it down (deliberately flunked the entrance exam) so he could return to his unit, for a rendevous with a certain Box Car cum Fat Boy there in far off Nagasaki.
Gonna write that one for the March NaNoWriPo. My ex came over this evening and we smoked a bit of mota and for awhile there I was in the zone, "Dinner With Andre" time, as another ex described me. We talked about you and your poetry and how effing A-list shit it was/is/will be and I told her that I hoped I lived long enough to see you reach the exalted, up up and away recognition you deserve. All that. Love your swag, adore your sass.
Betty, upon rereading I am struck by that last line and how closely it puts me in mind of the last line of Martin Cruz Smith's "Stallion Gate." Brilliant novel, btw. His portrait of Oppenheimer is sublime.
You should read his trilogy. "Gorky Park" has the best opening paragraph since Dickens' "A Tale of Two Cities."
xoxo
He would have loved this poem, I suspect . He might have spoken of rubble heaped like jenga sculpture, twisted gouty veins of metal, and...jeez. Nobody ever writes about this stuff. Glad you did.
The plane was "Bockscar," sometimes referred to as "Box Car" which I prefer. "Boxcar Blues" for my father, glowing in the dark, with an appointment to Annapolis but who turned it down (deliberately flunked the entrance exam) so he could return to his unit, for a rendevous with a certain Box Car cum Fat Boy there in far off Nagasaki.
Gonna write that one for the March NaNoWriPo. My ex came over this evening and we smoked a bit of mota and for awhile there I was in the zone, "Dinner With Andre" time, as another ex described me. We talked about you and your poetry and how effing A-list shit it was/is/will be and I told her that I hoped I lived long enough to see you reach the exalted, up up and away recognition you deserve. All that. Love your swag, adore your sass.
Betty, upon rereading I am struck by that last line and how closely it puts me in mind of the last line of Martin Cruz Smith's "Stallion Gate." Brilliant novel, btw. His portrait of Oppenheimer is sublime.
You should read his trilogy. "Gorky Park" has the best opening paragraph since Dickens' "A Tale of Two Cities."
xoxo
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17th Jan 2024 11:21pm
I KNOW! Not one fucker knew Enola Gay was THE PLANE that dropped THE BOMB, and ... sigh. It's the coolest name, ever, and the bomb that started nukes... FAT BOY. The atomic imagery was ... and the plane... and.. meh. It is what it is.
My grandparents raised me, and my grandpa was on the USS Franklin. So salute to your dad-o for being a badass. Sorry that the radiation fucked him up.
Thank you for sharing that part of you with me.
You two are kind, and based on your smoke-up-my-assing, I'm looking in to some stuff. I know a guy who knows a guy in publishing who might be able to keep my identity secret, like Batman.... stay tuned. Thanks for that. I mean it.
Gorky Park has been added to my TBR list. Thanks for sharing. I'm always down to read something kickass, recommended by someone whose opinion I value.
My grandparents raised me, and my grandpa was on the USS Franklin. So salute to your dad-o for being a badass. Sorry that the radiation fucked him up.
Thank you for sharing that part of you with me.
You two are kind, and based on your smoke-up-my-assing, I'm looking in to some stuff. I know a guy who knows a guy in publishing who might be able to keep my identity secret, like Batman.... stay tuned. Thanks for that. I mean it.
Gorky Park has been added to my TBR list. Thanks for sharing. I'm always down to read something kickass, recommended by someone whose opinion I value.
Re. Enola Gay
19th Jan 2024 10:31pm