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our incomplete story...
It was only an hour,
but it was
an emotional connection
of mouth to mouth
and tongue to tongue
while we were tasting
each other....
Time passed...
n the night spread it's hair
I had embroidered
desires on my dress
but he could not
unbuttoned my dress
Well I was not wrong
my feelings were not wrong,
but the time was wrong...
I wasted his time
I could not fit
into his free structure
he said..."don't come again.."
n the happiness
the excitement
that was frozen
on my face till yesterday
melted down
after hearing his
practical words...
The attires
wrapped in the
warmth of my bag
came out gently on bed
neither did I wear them
nor did he see them..
just an incompleteness
remained in the mind of both,
remained in the body of both...
It rained but in drops only
and I wanted to get wet
wanted to melt into his warmth
into his incompleteness
into his feelings
into his hands
I wanted to knelt down
and lick his disappointments
I wanted to faint
in his freshen scent....
but alas....
I remained dry
and he became wind
and flew into the sky...
Published 9th Dec 2023
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9th Dec 2023 7:06am
A poem that in our parlance might evoke the sympathetic reply, "So, you didn't score..." This poem evinced sympathetic sadness, especially this verse (hinting at things you might have been intending to show and use with him);
The attires
wrapped in the
warmth of my bag
came out gently on bed
neither did I wear them
nor did he see them..
just an incompleteness
remained in the mind of both,
remained in the body of both...
The attires
wrapped in the
warmth of my bag
came out gently on bed
neither did I wear them
nor did he see them..
just an incompleteness
remained in the mind of both,
remained in the body of both...
9th Dec 2023 10:52am
This poem is incomplete, its words are incomplete, the sentiments in it are indeed incomplete... an incompleteness surely indicates a sadness... Thanks for reading n commenting..
Anonymous
9th Dec 2023 10:06am
Beautiful. That last stanza was the perfect end to this poem
9th Dec 2023 10:52am
9th Dec 2023 11:32am
When the right person comes you'll know and you you feel complete. Keep on writing.
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