Winter Sky

This is excellent... well done db...

Thank you, I appreciate it!

This reads like classic poetry, from the imagery of color and (apt) skeletal trees to the circle you form with the beginning and end  This one is extra good.

Ooh classic poetry, I like that, lol.
Thanks so much for your comments.

PD has a sharp eye!

This certainly does have a classic, or neoclassical quality of stateliness to it that is simultaneously sad, yet elegant.

Even the textual arrangement hints at the verticality of a fluted marble column!

Wow, that makes me so happy. Thanks so much for your feedback, it was exciting for me.

you are such a gifted writer beautiful Debbie I'm amazed at your depths 💕

Thank you, u made me cry good tears. I feel the same way about your writing. Your work inspires my own. 💜

i can look up and see the winter sky delia

Looks like winter here. Hence the poem, lol.
Thank you for checking out.

Very profound! Love the wonderful imagery!

Hi Faith! Thank you so very much.
Writing isn't coming as easy to me lately because I'm under a lot of stress caring for my mom. So to hear nice feedback really means a lot to me. I feel like I'm still part of the community.

This has a lot of elements that mix together to capture the essence and feel of both an environmental, as well as emotional, atmosphere.  Solid use of metaphor and like analogy to depict the feel of the narrative.  As always, I can really tell you have a deep appreciation for nature.  There is a sense of tragedy, sadness, melancholy, and prolonged heartache, as the theme transitions.  The direction has a nice course and flow, and keeps, at least me, the reader wondering with each unraveling turn of the story or unfolding of the poem.  Excellent and original expressions.  It's like you've both pained and yearned to get this off your chest.  I can really see how you could do well in painting or drawing or working with something visual, as you've quite a vivid and lucid imagination.  You seem to relate that quite well in how you feel and have pieced together quite a poem here.  Anyway, I can tell you're getting more and more talented.  This is one of your better ones that I've read so far, in that it's that good.  Those are just some of the things I saw as the reader.  In fact, again, all of the metaphorical disposition in this is solid.  Thanks for sharing, and I'll see you around!

Thank you. That was truly so nice. When I read your comment I can see you really understood my feelings behind what I wrote. I cannot even tell you how much your feedback means, the despair I'm enduring with my mom, makes me not so confident as a writer. I'm very humbled & surprised people liked this one, lol
I'll be waiting for something from you.... ♟️

I agree with Pinkdreams
This has the feel of classic poetry through and through.
Just  simply amazing.
Love it!!

Thank you, so very nice of you!
I really appreciate the feedback.
Have a great night!