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All's fair
I will. not. bow.
not even when slip knot words
gather softly 'round my throat
challenging everything -
[yeah]most things I never thought.
he blessed me with perspective.
but I will not surrender
to a petticoat rustler, a hustler
with tender will
brain cocked on a choosy hammer
chipping on with a bitch of a backfire
[step lightly, my Darling
this is love, don't you know]
I will not yield/give/sigh
to impressions
of rough hands
that settle sweet dream delusions
rocking me too lightly
till I'm fierce
feral to the last fight
where conquerors go to die
I...
purify -
this sidewinder slithers
under meanings and over smiles
and will haunt
every
written
word
every time they slay.
but love be damned
and words be rain upon my face.
I will. not. bow.
not even when slip knot words
gather softly 'round my throat
challenging everything -
[yeah]most things I never thought.
he blessed me with perspective.
but I will not surrender
to a petticoat rustler, a hustler
with tender will
brain cocked on a choosy hammer
chipping on with a bitch of a backfire
[step lightly, my Darling
this is love, don't you know]
I will not yield/give/sigh
to impressions
of rough hands
that settle sweet dream delusions
rocking me too lightly
till I'm fierce
feral to the last fight
where conquerors go to die
I...
purify -
this sidewinder slithers
under meanings and over smiles
and will haunt
every
written
word
every time they slay.
but love be damned
and words be rain upon my face.
I will. not. bow.
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All's Fair
to me this has a wistful yet fierce qualtity to and is so elegant..
I...
purify -
sidewinder slithers
under meanings and over smiles
and will haunt
every
written
word
every time they slay.
but love be damned
and words be rain upon my face.
I will. not. bow.
firey brilliance..peace Crim
I...
purify -
sidewinder slithers
under meanings and over smiles
and will haunt
every
written
word
every time they slay.
but love be damned
and words be rain upon my face.
I will. not. bow.
firey brilliance..peace Crim
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re: All's Fair
26th Apr 2012 8:28am
wow, thanks crim! i probably should have put it with the rest of my competition entries, but i was unusually happy with this one. thank you for the comment and the add, it's been grand to see you around lately. [:
Fuck you're good
26th Apr 2012 8:31am
yeah very good , a petticoat rustler, a hustler
with tender will
brain cocked on a choosy hammer
chipping on with a bitch of a backfire
woah now that reminds me of a fuse that has bits soaked in petrol , it flares then settles in a rhapsodic build up to the boom lol great expressions all the way as per usual jes , keep doing what you do :)
with tender will
brain cocked on a choosy hammer
chipping on with a bitch of a backfire
woah now that reminds me of a fuse that has bits soaked in petrol , it flares then settles in a rhapsodic build up to the boom lol great expressions all the way as per usual jes , keep doing what you do :)
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re: Fuck you're good
26th Apr 2012 10:41am
well, thank you, diddi. it's good to hear you got the feeling of that bit and i appreciate the encouragement. [:
Intriguing.
Anonymous
26th Apr 2012 8:36am
I saw this entry in the competition threads and was quite intrigued with it. 'Slipknot words gather softly round the throat' is a riddle of a line. It's got quite a sinister quality to it, especially towards the end.
I'm not sure who this is about, but God help them!
I'm not sure who this is about, but God help them!
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re: Intriguing.
ah, thank you! i did modify that line a bit for posting here hoping for a bit more emphasis, and i think it may have worked...
"God help them" - haha! i'm quite sure he's not the least bit afraid of my ultimate badassness, unfortunately. [:
"God help them" - haha! i'm quite sure he's not the least bit afraid of my ultimate badassness, unfortunately. [:
can we trouble the good lady...
Anonymous
26th Apr 2012 1:12pm
...for a reading?
nuance, and the delicious timbre of your pipes, may well elevate this piece to planes ethereal :-)
nuance, and the delicious timbre of your pipes, may well elevate this piece to planes ethereal :-)
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re: can we trouble the good lady...
well, i will most certainly oblige, though i think i may have preferred it on the page. [:
re: re: can we trouble the good lady...
Anonymous
26th Apr 2012 10:38pm
Ah splendid....we are, as ever, wrapped softly in sound...
:-)
:-)
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..
26th Apr 2012 2:09pm
re: ..
26th Apr 2012 5:03pm
...
26th Apr 2012 2:17pm
well your back with a vengance. I think I saw the words peel off the page as I was reading them
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re: ...
26th Apr 2012 5:04pm
brain'cocked, choosy'hammer---yes!
26th Apr 2012 3:27pm
great piece, m'dear...
rich wit
i'maginitive
i'magery
keep on ritin thee rite on on on
rich wit
i'maginitive
i'magery
keep on ritin thee rite on on on
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re: brain'cocked, choosy'hammer---yes!
26th Apr 2012 5:10pm
Nice
26th Apr 2012 6:25pm
I too will not Lesser to bow to those who do not mind for they do not matter. Great choice of music and the powerful voice. Kudos my friend.
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re: Nice
26th Apr 2012 7:34pm
Expression
26th Apr 2012 6:47pm
Great expression and choice of words. I read it first, then the vid which only made the nuances SING! Nice, I bow to your greatness
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re: Expression
26th Apr 2012 7:35pm
Brilliant
27th Apr 2012 2:04am
I envy your talent. Not much else I can say. Great piece, as are all of yours. :)
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re: Brilliant
27th Apr 2012 8:04am
rarr!
geez, love, your voice gave me chills! and i like how your internal rhythm made the whole piece crawl nicely on the page. job well done, as usual. :)
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re: rarr!
Joss! fantastic to see you in the building, my darling! and thank you so much for the ups. now, if you could only find some time to toss a scrap your deprived audience. [:
You are...
28th Apr 2012 3:42am
a spicy little dish. The one you order out of curiosity and are blown away by it. Enough to make it the thing you order whenever you sit down.
This is absolutely splendid, m'dear. The fourth stanza was exemplary, perfect in its playful way. The slipknot was a beauty of an image. Ghostly little words gathered around your neck thick with charged memory. Bad ass. And the fight within in the third stanza is exquisite
This is absolutely splendid, m'dear. The fourth stanza was exemplary, perfect in its playful way. The slipknot was a beauty of an image. Ghostly little words gathered around your neck thick with charged memory. Bad ass. And the fight within in the third stanza is exquisite
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re: You are...
28th Apr 2012 8:27am
amazing how you set me for my morning! thank you so much, PTM, i'm humbled. [:
Laissez faire
29th Apr 2012 10:10pm
spose a few more drops upon your face certainly won't drowned you...The hope I have is for whomever/whatever evoked this denial of kowtowing, to provoke you more-for the response is a powerful read...[step lightly, my Darling
this is love, don't you know]-delightfully toxic!
this is love, don't you know]-delightfully toxic!
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re: Laissez faire
29th Apr 2012 11:05pm
well, hey now... let's not wish provocation upon me, Mr Baron! [:
thank you so much for the kind words. it's always a little thrill to see what's caught your keen eyes.
thank you so much for the kind words. it's always a little thrill to see what's caught your keen eyes.
I Dig It.
Right On.
So masterful the way you move between game and truth in this poem, and win on both counts. You totally kick ass as a poet.
So masterful the way you move between game and truth in this poem, and win on both counts. You totally kick ass as a poet.
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re: I Dig It.
5th May 2012 9:34am
though the thought of me kicking ass at anything defies my wuss of a sore head this morning, it's super flattering coming from yourself.
thank you for stopping in, Ms Selah. [:
thank you for stopping in, Ms Selah. [:
first time read of you
5th May 2012 5:49am
This is the first time I'm reading your stuff..love your voice in the poem..and I dont me the youtube audio...eventhough thats nice as well. I wanted to read it first before I heard it..the Poem reminds a lot of Robert E. Howards stuff...he wrote the Conan series and other strong characters such as Red Sonja...your definitely a Red Sonja..:) ..Its late and I'm rambling..will check out your other poems as ..so you may not be done with my ramblins just yet..:)
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re: first time read of you
5th May 2012 9:37am
well thank you for reading and taking the time to comment (as many times as you have)! i'll have to look up this Sonja of rouge and her barbarian. [:
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6th May 2012 5:58pm
oh J- this one has really been staying with me. Keep finding myself coming back to it..great show misses! not jealous per say- but certainly humbled. well, perhaps a tad bit jealous of your reading- a real talent on top of the write itself
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re: ...
6th May 2012 6:03pm
ooh, i love it when a write does that, as one or two of yours have done to me; happy to hear something of mine could return the favor. [:
thank you
thank you
Re: All's fair
29th May 2012 6:57pm
I LOVE this, so much power, and I very much agree, your voice is dead cool ;D
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re: Re: All's fair
29th May 2012 7:04pm
thank you for taking the time to leave a comment, glad you enjoyed it. [:
welcome to DU [:
welcome to DU [:
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1st Apr 2013 10:19pm
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2nd Apr 2013 9:37am
Re: All's fair
25th Aug 2013 11:10pm
Strictly writing this so you see the orange indicator.
write something. or if you have post it. haven't heard anything from ya in a good while
am curious.
write something. or if you have post it. haven't heard anything from ya in a good while
am curious.
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