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Learning to Fly
I went out looking for the ghost I used to be
And when I found him he fell in the rocks beneath my feet
A part of me died inside and I am lost beyond my eyes
The mirrors shattered now my soul can't find a way home
And yet, perhaps he was the one in me that held me back
When I fell in love but left the words unsaid
And it crawled into the pile of regrets to save in a box
He's been with me forever and letting him go is so hard to do
As I look through the cracks unsure if I should reach out
To pull him back from the broken image of who I used to be
Or let him sink into a grave beneath the rocks and reflective glass
That only served to remind me of how safe it felt in familiarity
While the fear of a path not travelled lights under each new footprint
uncovered in the sand where fresh steps record a journey untold
Unfolding through a haze of mystery I want to cut into shreads
The cape of a super hero who saved no one but himself
From becoming the one he was always meant to be
The enemy within cloaked behind the cape of tattered threads
That can no longer hide the side still residing inside, waiting to fly
Learning to fly while no longer held down by the weight of the past
And when I found him he fell in the rocks beneath my feet
A part of me died inside and I am lost beyond my eyes
The mirrors shattered now my soul can't find a way home
And yet, perhaps he was the one in me that held me back
When I fell in love but left the words unsaid
And it crawled into the pile of regrets to save in a box
He's been with me forever and letting him go is so hard to do
As I look through the cracks unsure if I should reach out
To pull him back from the broken image of who I used to be
Or let him sink into a grave beneath the rocks and reflective glass
That only served to remind me of how safe it felt in familiarity
While the fear of a path not travelled lights under each new footprint
uncovered in the sand where fresh steps record a journey untold
Unfolding through a haze of mystery I want to cut into shreads
The cape of a super hero who saved no one but himself
From becoming the one he was always meant to be
The enemy within cloaked behind the cape of tattered threads
That can no longer hide the side still residing inside, waiting to fly
Learning to fly while no longer held down by the weight of the past
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ABSOLUTELY EXCELLENT
Anonymous
24th Apr 2012 12:09pm
A wonderfully written prose poem...
Love your use of words
and "pile of regrets", "image of who I used to be", "the cape of a super hero who saved no one but himself"
A good read
cheers
Kitty
Love your use of words
and "pile of regrets", "image of who I used to be", "the cape of a super hero who saved no one but himself"
A good read
cheers
Kitty
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re: ABSOLUTELY EXCELLENT
24th Apr 2012 6:16pm
Thanks for commenting Kitty, this is my first complete piece of anything since my stroke and I am finally starting to feel like myself again, which is kinda what this poem is about, but more of a new self, maybe because the brain cells I lost have forced me to let go of something that has disconnected in memories and visioon but that still remains in the creative regions of grayness between my ears where everything is black and white. jj
Wow Man...
24th Apr 2012 5:22pm
Seriously, u always Always bring it, & im touched by your words, really its so beautiful:) Every line kept me wanting more. Wonderful work, P..;)
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re: Wow Man...
24th Apr 2012 6:25pm
Thanks LL, glad you like it so much! I've been trying to write something for over two months now and I just couldn't write more than a stanza here and there, so it felt good to have an inspiration even if it wasn't my usual style of writng a poem. I was starting to think I had forgotten how, so I will have to do some more to keep from losing it altogether. jj
re: re: Wow Man...
24th Apr 2012 7:09pm
You will Never lose it, jj! Every one of us suffer from writer's block, so don't feel bad:)
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re: re: re: Wow Man...
24th Apr 2012 10:14pm
Yea, I know, but I was more worried about writers erase... I saw the CAT scans and MRI of my brain right after I had the stroke and there were these 3 dark blotches where brain cells use to be, so I was kinda concerned about it when I wasn't able to keep a string of thoughts for more than a few minutes and trouble recalling memories along with a considerable loss of eyesight. Brains don't heal like cuts and broken bones. I worked with brain injured people before and I worried more than I needed to, but there are still a lot of things not working right and some that may never recover, but as long as I can still write a poem from time to time, life is still worth living. Now if only I can win the lottery...
Hey :)
25th Apr 2012 2:07am
So good to have you back JJ :D
Love the poem, raw and moving. Many lines resonated with me a lot.
"The mirrors shattered now my soul can't find a way home
And yet, perhaps he was the one in me that held me back"
"And it crawled into the pile of regrets to save in a box"
"Unfolding through a haze of mystery I want to cut into shreads
The cape of a super hero who saved no one but himself
From becoming the one he was always meant to be
The enemy within cloaked behind the cape of tattered threads
That can no longer hide the side still residing inside, waiting to fly"
Beautiful.
Welcome back.
Love the poem, raw and moving. Many lines resonated with me a lot.
"The mirrors shattered now my soul can't find a way home
And yet, perhaps he was the one in me that held me back"
"And it crawled into the pile of regrets to save in a box"
"Unfolding through a haze of mystery I want to cut into shreads
The cape of a super hero who saved no one but himself
From becoming the one he was always meant to be
The enemy within cloaked behind the cape of tattered threads
That can no longer hide the side still residing inside, waiting to fly"
Beautiful.
Welcome back.
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re: Hey :)
25th Apr 2012 5:44am
Thanks Indie, always nice to get feedback from you! I can't say that I will have a flurry of poems pouring from my pen like I did in the few months prior t the stroke, but it's a restart that needed an oil change and a radiator flush, and I sure got my clock cleaned in a timely manner... jj
JJ
25th Apr 2012 8:05pm
sorry to hear about your stroke I wish you good health and happiness but your talent seems to be flourishing..I would have to quote your entire poem it is brilliant..I missed you glad you're back..peace Crim
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re: JJ
26th Apr 2012 3:09am
Thanks Crim, glad you enjoyed it. I am not the best judge of my own work, I didn't think it was all that great, but so far people seem to like it. jj
Re: JJ
24th Oct 2024 7:50pm
Bren, , check out the new song version, hope you like it! Let me know what you think...
JJ
JJ
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26th Apr 2012 8:03pm
Brilliant!
27th Apr 2012 7:03pm
So glad to see you writing again! You are as incredible as always. Excellent piece!
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re: Brilliant!
27th Apr 2012 7:53pm
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2nd May 2012 5:15pm
damn ur poems are incredibly...deep, I think that's the right word O.O and DAMN you have a lot of poems!! xD my goal: read one every day if not more!
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re: ...
3rd May 2012 4:13am
more, definately more, lol... I even have others not posted here, if you can imagine that. But I've been writing for over 30 years, so this really isn't that many when you consider that's not even 10 poems a year. As long as someone likes them, it doesn't really matter how many there are. Thanks for commenting Nicky. jj
re: ...
15th May 2014 8:38am
Hey Nicky, let me know if you ever come back on DUP. Email me at poetryman@seeds-and-weeds.com jj
Re: ...
11th Oct 2016 3:01pm
Nicky, I missed you 4 months ago when you last came back. Send me a message and let me know how you are. I posted audio of this poem, let me know what you think...
Miss you, JJ
Miss you, JJ
Re: Learning to Fly
18th Jul 2012 8:25am
Oh wow! I can't believe I never commented on this! I added it to my reading it list, because it was one of many of your poems that I love... somehow I never commented. That was rude of me. Im sorry, JJ. This piece is absolutely wonderful!!!
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re: Re: Learning to Fly
18th Jul 2012 8:54am
Thank you Jesica, though if I take off a letter grade for each day you were late with this assignment, that would be... let me see... Z- ?
LOL, it's ok, I appreciate you comments no matter how long it took you!
:)
jj
LOL, it's ok, I appreciate you comments no matter how long it took you!
:)
jj
re: re: Re: Learning to Fly
18th Jul 2012 6:41pm
Ahhh lol. JJ, I still have time to complete my assignment. You did not give me a due date!!! Hah! LOl!
My apologies for never commenting. It is a very lovely and magnificent poem.
My apologies for never commenting. It is a very lovely and magnificent poem.
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re: re: re: Re: Learning to Fly
18th Jul 2012 7:03pm
I never gave you a due date? DOH! I knew there would be a loophole in there somewhere... Now I'm going to need some white out to fix that F-. I know, I'll do what I used to do to the F's on my report cards in school, make it an A with a flat top, hehehehe...
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And thank you for a lovely and magnificent comment!
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And thank you for a lovely and magnificent comment!
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