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Twilight of the Soul
Tonight was in possession of the most
sinister looking sunset.
October chill, shivers my step.
Haunted ominous gray drifting clouds
hover above the dying burnt orange sun.
Now a collapsed firey glow on the horizon.
To mirror dark charcoal thoughts,
like puffs of exhaust from a weary brain.
Roaring flames in my heart from a gasoline of pain.
For some the twilight of the soul has taken its reign.
sinister looking sunset.
October chill, shivers my step.
Haunted ominous gray drifting clouds
hover above the dying burnt orange sun.
Now a collapsed firey glow on the horizon.
To mirror dark charcoal thoughts,
like puffs of exhaust from a weary brain.
Roaring flames in my heart from a gasoline of pain.
For some the twilight of the soul has taken its reign.
Published 6th Oct 2023
Author's Note
This was written for a friend. Here is a haunted sunset.
Waiting for a spectacular one too.
I'd like to add to this poem at some point.
Waiting for a spectacular one too.
I'd like to add to this poem at some point.
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6th Oct 2023 11:52am
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6th Oct 2023 2:13pm
I enjoyed this vibe a lot.
It's so thought provoking
while being emotionally engaging as well
It's so thought provoking
while being emotionally engaging as well
6th Oct 2023 2:26pm
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6th Oct 2023 4:24pm
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6th Oct 2023 5:21pm
6th Oct 2023 6:33pm
I totally agree with Naajir. I was captivated by this poem.
Wishing you much peace my friend.
Wishing you much peace my friend.
6th Oct 2023 7:01pm
I'm about to read yours.
Thank you very much, I love if I can resonate if even or a moment in time.
Thank you very much, I love if I can resonate if even or a moment in time.
6th Oct 2023 10:06pm
Gasoline is terrifying.
I've had too many close calls with that shit.
I've had too many close calls with that shit.
6th Oct 2023 10:14pm
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7th Oct 2023 00:24am
6th Oct 2023 11:16pm
This has a very powerful sense of desire in it. Very sharp and on point metaphors, in breaking down and describing the emotional aesthetic and interpretation of your inspiration. It's almost like you can see a captivating fury ahead, ha-ha. In that context of emotion, there's a very raw feel to this. Like you're venting, somewhat. You don't hold back, and really drive the point home to the reader about whatever it is you're dealing with. I can identify, because I do the same thing in my writings. You have to see it that way - yourself in your writings. It will always come out. If you embrace that, you'll grow exponentially as an artist. You know how I have a zeal and longing for justice in the world. I guess I can kind of relate, from that perspective, in what you capture here, with covering and conveying a sunset. I share in the artistic struggle of what's here, and the sacrifice of putting pen to paper, and the rewarding fruit it produces. It's like trying to bottle the noetic lightning of thoughts. Anyway, good read as always, and I hope to have encouraged you. I'll see you around!
7th Oct 2023 00:36am
Yes, it is me venting. But I want to give it beauty, not bitch, lol. Thank you for everything you said. It's nice to have someone appreciate I put myself in the writing, I agree with everything you said
