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I have imprisoned the walls of my house
She wants to breathe, she wants to kiss the winds
I have decorated it with various colors but
Still she keeps looking at me day n night with her colorless face
She embraces the soil, she kisses the silent shadow
When I go to hug her, she remains standing straight
she is standing for me, she is surrounded by me
She wants to bathe in the clouds, she wants to be away from me
She has grown old and her bones often broken.
When I fix it, she peeks even through the cracks
She wants to breathe, she wants to kiss the winds
I have decorated it with various colors but
Still she keeps looking at me day n night with her colorless face
She embraces the soil, she kisses the silent shadow
When I go to hug her, she remains standing straight
she is standing for me, she is surrounded by me
She wants to bathe in the clouds, she wants to be away from me
She has grown old and her bones often broken.
When I fix it, she peeks even through the cracks
Published 23rd Sep 2023
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23rd Sep 2023 2:48pm
24th Sep 2023 1:45am
Describing the walls of one's home in a personified way, latter verses make it sound like a senile old person who wanders and sometimes wants to stay and sometimes doesn't, as per these verses:
.She embraces the soil, she kisses the silent shadow
When I go to hug her, she remains standing straight
she is standing for me, she is surrounded by me
She wants to bathe in the clouds, she wants to be away from me
.She embraces the soil, she kisses the silent shadow
When I go to hug her, she remains standing straight
she is standing for me, she is surrounded by me
She wants to bathe in the clouds, she wants to be away from me
23rd Sep 2023 5:56pm
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23rd Sep 2023 10:01pm
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24th Sep 2023 1:45am
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24th Sep 2023 1:46am
24th Sep 2023 1:40am
Reads like someone going mad to me, or trapped at the very least. It is not an easy on the eye poem. It's quite disturbing.
24th Sep 2023 1:43am
24th Sep 2023 1:47am
This a really clever and a great approach. It's super interesting, because of how you made it more than a dwelling. You gave it tangible substance.
Great ideas, and they work well here.
Great ideas, and they work well here.
24th Sep 2023 2:11am
