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Off She Goes.
He yelled.
Her soul left her body and was swimming
in cool water, possibly a lake. Who knows.
He stopped yelling.
Her soul came back, relaxed.
He asked if she had heard a word he said.
She answered with a "huh?"
Again he yelled...
Her soul left her body and was swimming
in cool water, possibly a lake. Who knows.
He stopped yelling.
Her soul came back, relaxed.
He asked if she had heard a word he said.
She answered with a "huh?"
Again he yelled...
Published 13th Sep 2023
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13th Sep 2023 11:28pm
13th Sep 2023 11:31pm
14th Sep 2023 3:08am
Dear N,
I love the interaction between the two. Or lack thereof. Her response is so relatable. For me her leaving her body to be away is awesome. Fantastic snippet of a relationship. H🌷
I love the interaction between the two. Or lack thereof. Her response is so relatable. For me her leaving her body to be away is awesome. Fantastic snippet of a relationship. H🌷
14th Sep 2023 1:41pm
14th Sep 2023 8:26am
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15th Sep 2023 1:34pm
22nd Sep 2023 10:14pm
Short and to the point. I guess it something most of us do without really wanting to, but you presented this very nicely.
Great work.
Great work.
23rd Sep 2023 10:30pm
5th May 2024 1:24am
I read this and all the pieces of a puzzle on the table slid slowly together into adhesion.
