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Falling
Cherry colored leaves have a magic relationship with autumn air.
They fall with a graceful nonchalance, not a single care.
They are meant to fall, they knew it all along.
No need to despair.
They cascade to a lonely unheard song.
In my heart there is a dusty tomb.
For the dead blooms.
For all the disillusioned pieces I hoard of you.
Gathered around bleeding crimsin soul shaped leaves.
A hint of beauty to ease the grief.
They fall with a graceful nonchalance, not a single care.
They are meant to fall, they knew it all along.
No need to despair.
They cascade to a lonely unheard song.
In my heart there is a dusty tomb.
For the dead blooms.
For all the disillusioned pieces I hoard of you.
Gathered around bleeding crimsin soul shaped leaves.
A hint of beauty to ease the grief.
Published 11th Sep 2023
| Edited 14th Sep 2023
Author's Note
The fall is my favorite time of year.
Many more poems to come......
Many more poems to come......
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11th Sep 2023 1:40am
this is very beautiful Debbie I enjoyed all of it but I liked the idea of you hoarding portions of a person 💕
11th Sep 2023 1:44am
Thank you. And you know I thought of you when I used the word Crimsin. I think we hoard what we want to believe, to avoid the pain of disillusionment.
I really look forward to your feedback.
Hugs ❤️
I really look forward to your feedback.
Hugs ❤️
11th Sep 2023 5:25am
Dear D,
There is a delicate gentleness in this poem for me. I am looking forward to the fall with great anticipation. The metaphor of an unrequited love being left behind for a new season is refreshing as it is very clever. New opportunities arise with a new setting. Great insight, wonderful write. H🌷
There is a delicate gentleness in this poem for me. I am looking forward to the fall with great anticipation. The metaphor of an unrequited love being left behind for a new season is refreshing as it is very clever. New opportunities arise with a new setting. Great insight, wonderful write. H🌷
11th Sep 2023 8:31am
Hi! Thank you so much. A lot in life can be compared to the seasons, death and re-birth, of relationships, feelings. I'm so glad you liked it. 😊
11th Sep 2023 11:49am
I closed my eyes after reading this and felt a peace I needed this morning. Thank you for this gift.
11th Sep 2023 12:04pm
I'm ever so happy it brought you peace.
❤️
Wow, that was such a beautiful thing to share with me.
There is a quote - if you have eased the life of one person, you did your job
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Wow, that was such a beautiful thing to share with me.
There is a quote - if you have eased the life of one person, you did your job
11th Sep 2023 2:04pm
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14th Sep 2023 3:46pm
Hi thank you so much! I took a break yesterday, so I have to catch up on my reading.
Have a wonderful day!
Have a wonderful day!
16th Sep 2023 8:43am
Somewhat conceptual and visual, though ending in a lachrymose fashion. I enjoy the colorful metaphorical representation of the environment, atmosphere, and mood you convey, as you bring the theme and direction to the pining of your heart for love. Very creative. I feel like you're growing as an artist. Every time I read something new by you, you become even more bold, and concrete with your imagination. Anyway, thanks for sharing.
16th Sep 2023 9:29am
Hi! Thank you so much. Having such a great audience helps me to be more confident. I always love your feedback.
I feel like I'm growing too.
Have a great weekend!
I feel like I'm growing too.
Have a great weekend!
17th Sep 2023 10:18pm
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