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Love at Dawn
Our embrace is tight
sleek
sensual
The early sunlight peaks in
snaking all around our smiles
Hands, legs, bodies
souls, hearts
entwined
Our language of love
together, forever
always
sleek
sensual
The early sunlight peaks in
snaking all around our smiles
Hands, legs, bodies
souls, hearts
entwined
Our language of love
together, forever
always
Published 25th Aug 2023
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25th Aug 2023 11:13pm
26th Aug 2023 00:50am
26th Aug 2023 2:31am
“Peaks” should be “peeks” to be grammatical, but the mistake feels intentional and apposite to the theme of the poem. I like the faintly melancholic, romantic impression it creates.
26th Aug 2023 2:33am
Maybe it was intentional, maybe it was a mistake....hence the mystery. Thanks love. Keep on writing. <3
26th Aug 2023 3:57am
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27th Aug 2023 3:03am
Dear ML,
Love it. The imagery of two people who love each other with such passion is so sweetly enviable. I so enjoyed this poem. H🌷
Love it. The imagery of two people who love each other with such passion is so sweetly enviable. I so enjoyed this poem. H🌷
28th Aug 2023 2:43am
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- Edited 29th Dec 2023 8:45pm
30th Aug 2023 00:16am
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