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bath sheba
One night in Jerusalem, King David was walking upon his rooftop
when he spotted a beautiful woman bathing nearby (2 Samuel 11:2).
he blew a blatant kiss across the room
before she knew the tenor of his song;
then there were stolen whiffs of her perfume,
when sin was in no hurry to be wrong.
glances of covert whim made picture frames
of every gesture and enticing flirt,
until, infernoed by expanding flames,
wisdom gave up the will to be alert.
forbidden hands with God-forbidden touch
empires of darkness took for golden light;
and when stark wine waxed bitter from too much,
the crumbling of her pie poisoned his bite.
bathsheba, on her unrepentant roof
secrets exposed where sacredness should pose;
uncontrite royalty slain by slight proof,
a lofty tower withered by a rose.
© Copyright 2023 August 16
by Clyve A. Bowen♫
when he spotted a beautiful woman bathing nearby (2 Samuel 11:2).
he blew a blatant kiss across the room
before she knew the tenor of his song;
then there were stolen whiffs of her perfume,
when sin was in no hurry to be wrong.
glances of covert whim made picture frames
of every gesture and enticing flirt,
until, infernoed by expanding flames,
wisdom gave up the will to be alert.
forbidden hands with God-forbidden touch
empires of darkness took for golden light;
and when stark wine waxed bitter from too much,
the crumbling of her pie poisoned his bite.
bathsheba, on her unrepentant roof
secrets exposed where sacredness should pose;
uncontrite royalty slain by slight proof,
a lofty tower withered by a rose.
© Copyright 2023 August 16
by Clyve A. Bowen♫
Published 18th Aug 2023
Author's Note
Narration: The Story of David and Bathsheba: https://youtu.be/bDNYh13FBoE
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I have done a few rhyming poems on the David-Bathsheba story in DUP. You mainly depict, it appears, the imagined interactions of the illicit couple when David had invited her to his palace without her husband.
Thanks for your observations, Solomon_Song. You may have vested interest, seeing Solomon was one of the sons, and successor of, King David.
The thing about the route and character of a poem is that it has all the possible ways of a wild river as its options. It may take a microcosmic element and blow it up into gargantuan proportions; or it may make a molehill out of a mountain. I elected a particular focus that expressed the corruptible nature of deception in high places.
I would be interested in comparing your interpretations and emphases based on the same experience. Why not share a page link here?
Thanks for the R/L; a great honour it is.
Sincerely
cab
The thing about the route and character of a poem is that it has all the possible ways of a wild river as its options. It may take a microcosmic element and blow it up into gargantuan proportions; or it may make a molehill out of a mountain. I elected a particular focus that expressed the corruptible nature of deception in high places.
I would be interested in comparing your interpretations and emphases based on the same experience. Why not share a page link here?
Thanks for the R/L; a great honour it is.
Sincerely
cab
10th Nov 2024 6:35pm
In belated reply, I don't have a sense of vested interest - I claim no relationship to the biblical Solomon - but shared interest in terms of poetic subject.
