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notion
the day can seem so long
whispers on the wind tell me I'm lonely
I hear the chatter and dismiss its winsome thoughts
entertaining thoughts of personal nature
a shared moment
perhaps just a look
and I would know you were feeling me
caress the idea and bring it forth
may it come to fruition
in the light of day I blush to be feeling such a way
it makes me uneasy
so I push the thoughts down deep
where they drive me mad
I can feel your caress
soft as a breeze
just barely a touch would be too much
and I would cascade over the falls
tumbling into your arms
a hint of naughty and you would know
I was yours
Published 12th Aug 2023
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12th Aug 2023 3:49am
Ooh, I was really liking this and then you go add the last stanza and BAM! I’m in love with this!
12th Aug 2023 3:50am
12th Aug 2023 11:01am
your poem is wonderful,
It moves my feelings and sensations
You prompted me to write a response to your poem
💕 💕 💕 💕 💕 💕 💕 💕 💕
When I think, I sit alone,
When I lose my dreams to flow;
When I suffer from lamentation, the pain of despair follows,
When all this day goes by leaves me alone,
When silence reigns in my fixed residence,
When all my pain plunges me into the abyss of failure,
When a joke doesn't make me laugh anymore,
I feel your fingers touch my sore edge
Sponge my tears before they roll down my freckled face
Hold my hand before I drop the nib that writes on a blank page.
You are my soulmate, you are my hope
You are my friend who lifts me up from the depths of despair,
It helps me to breathe in the needed air in tired lungs;
May it be today, yes today, I found my longtime friend and twin hiding on this page.💕 💕 💕 💕
It moves my feelings and sensations
You prompted me to write a response to your poem
💕 💕 💕 💕 💕 💕 💕 💕 💕
When I think, I sit alone,
When I lose my dreams to flow;
When I suffer from lamentation, the pain of despair follows,
When all this day goes by leaves me alone,
When silence reigns in my fixed residence,
When all my pain plunges me into the abyss of failure,
When a joke doesn't make me laugh anymore,
I feel your fingers touch my sore edge
Sponge my tears before they roll down my freckled face
Hold my hand before I drop the nib that writes on a blank page.
You are my soulmate, you are my hope
You are my friend who lifts me up from the depths of despair,
It helps me to breathe in the needed air in tired lungs;
May it be today, yes today, I found my longtime friend and twin hiding on this page.💕 💕 💕 💕
15th Aug 2023 00:45am
hello dearest poet I love your poetic responses they make me smile thank you ❤️
12th Aug 2023 11:12am
15th Aug 2023 00:47am
13th Aug 2023 00:23am
I feel you... crimsin. 😉 I feel what you are saying in the poem anyhow. I feel what you are saying to me. I don't know what you're feeling because I'm not you but getting to my point, this reads of taking a chance & trusting our instincts to take that chance & ask... could this lead to love? Most likely, it will only lead to lunch, right? But hey, that's ok! 😊
15th Aug 2023 00:48am
hey there dearest Billy thank you for such a great response yes, lunch probably right 💕
13th Aug 2023 5:41am
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14th Aug 2023 2:49am
I love the excitement you’ve captured with your words… it made my mind try to paint pictures to match! Thank you.
15th Aug 2023 00:49am
21st Aug 2023 5:41am
That second to last stanza feels like a surreal dream, it's wonderful and tender.
Nice work.
Nice work.
21st Aug 2023 8:06pm
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