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Aztec
The drums beat heavy
and my hair makes
a thick, wet whap
on my naked back
Streaked in the gore
of previous sacrifices,
their willing
hearts still pulsing
against my palm
I pause at the stone table
and shudder
at how fucking
much it cost
to have your
arms slide
around
my waist
and my hair makes
a thick, wet whap
on my naked back
Streaked in the gore
of previous sacrifices,
their willing
hearts still pulsing
against my palm
I pause at the stone table
and shudder
at how fucking
much it cost
to have your
arms slide
around
my waist
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Re. Aztec
22nd Jul 2023 6:44am
Not surprised it's "ultraviolent" - the Aztecs practised human sacrifices. Had you been in Mexico?
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Re: Re. Aztec
22nd Jul 2023 2:25pm
I have, a few times, and the ruins are stunning. I’m glad you liked it, my friend. Thanks for the read.
Re. Aztec
Your writing always heightens my senses with an air of mystery.
Sometimes the cost is way too much, but I want it anyway.
Love 💜
Sometimes the cost is way too much, but I want it anyway.
Love 💜
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Re: Re. Aztec
22nd Jul 2023 2:26pm
I’m learning if you can afford to pay, that the cost is … it just is.
Thank you D-bear. As always you make my face get smiley.
Thank you D-bear. As always you make my face get smiley.
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Re: Re. Aztec
22nd Jul 2023 2:31pm
Fuck, man, yes, this, all of this. ethan, your insight is a gift, and I’m delighted to have it.
Why can’t I copy text?! I want to analyze your analysis and nerd out over some shit.
But yes, the acknowledgment that sacrifices will be made, the elevation of the person, the relationship cadence all blended to a beat of a drum, you nailed it.
Thank you. I appreciate you.
Why can’t I copy text?! I want to analyze your analysis and nerd out over some shit.
But yes, the acknowledgment that sacrifices will be made, the elevation of the person, the relationship cadence all blended to a beat of a drum, you nailed it.
Thank you. I appreciate you.
Re. Aztec
22nd Jul 2023 2:09pm
Whew, girl. You rock.
I feel that drum beat in my chest (and elsewhere, of course).
Your imagery is amazing.
Have a Happy day. I figure we could all use a little happiness today.
I feel that drum beat in my chest (and elsewhere, of course).
Your imagery is amazing.
Have a Happy day. I figure we could all use a little happiness today.
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Re: Re. Aztec
22nd Jul 2023 2:31pm
Girl, that’s always throbbing, no need for a drum!
Thank you my beautiful friend. I always appreciate your feedback!
Thank you my beautiful friend. I always appreciate your feedback!
Re. Aztec
22nd Jul 2023 4:39pm
(I really really dislike the dumb ass RL limits!)
I've read this a few times, building a bridge between the last stanza and the priors. Sort of like "you will have no gods besides me" theme almost. Like we cut off the past, to be free enough to take on the gift of the current partakings.
Your way of expressing how love is a war is not as brutal as it is portrayed. Because most of the implied suffering is our own selves, lashing out. The damn angst! You flay it well. The bestest, actually. Like they know you're a tiger, but they open your cage anyway.
And your descriptive aftermath is always so freaking awesome.
Excellent.
I've read this a few times, building a bridge between the last stanza and the priors. Sort of like "you will have no gods besides me" theme almost. Like we cut off the past, to be free enough to take on the gift of the current partakings.
Your way of expressing how love is a war is not as brutal as it is portrayed. Because most of the implied suffering is our own selves, lashing out. The damn angst! You flay it well. The bestest, actually. Like they know you're a tiger, but they open your cage anyway.
And your descriptive aftermath is always so freaking awesome.
Excellent.
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Re: Re. Aztec
22nd Jul 2023 6:03pm
Thanks my friend. The damn angst! Yes! I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Holding my end down.
Holding my end down.
Re. Aztec
22nd Jul 2023 10:19pm
I am all about history and ancient cultures, so you had me at "Aztec". The ruins are beautiful and filled with so much energy one cannot help but absorb it. And those who absorb it integrate it into their modern lives—such as this poetry.
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Re: Re. Aztec
23rd Jul 2023 1:32am
They are absolutely fascinating, and the ruins reverberate with an unending link of that indescribable something. It's a heady thing. Thank you my dear, you are a lovely soul and I value your comments, and your energy.