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The Letting Go
Some sort of piracy,
the way you stole
my days away from me.
God, how they went
so willingly.
There are those we seek,
and those that find us.
Some set free,
and some that bind us.
All I'm left with,
you're only gift,
when you wore my shirt
those couple of days;
Like feathered wings,
so uplifted, I carried you
sometimes, against the wall.
I still haven't picked up the mirror.
Conceded, it leans against the wall.
I close my eyes, to shut you out,
yet haven't washed the shirt.
The smell of you now threaded
within those very seams.
The thoughts of you, embedded.
Conceded, to dreams.
I was never good at holding on,
and even worse at letting go.
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Published 19th May 2023
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19th May 2023 1:17am
19th May 2023 2:32am
Thank you! It's short, but I think it's effective enough.
I should probably do more brief ones.
I should probably do more brief ones.
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19th May 2023 1:29am
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19th May 2023 2:34am
It's an older write from an old website. I changed it a little bit. But it holds up well, I think?
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19th May 2023 3:20am
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19th May 2023 3:37am
Hello Styxian
I have to say this is a short one from you, distilled enough to get to the core of the matter with enriched details threaded throughout each stanza, you too do not need to say a lot to paint the heart of the matter at hand and it suits you well good sir, this was gorgeous and aching in all it's imagery, I think I will take it away with me.
Kind Regards
-A
I have to say this is a short one from you, distilled enough to get to the core of the matter with enriched details threaded throughout each stanza, you too do not need to say a lot to paint the heart of the matter at hand and it suits you well good sir, this was gorgeous and aching in all it's imagery, I think I will take it away with me.
Kind Regards
-A
21st May 2023 3:41pm
You may take it with you. The way you yourself write, you deserve gifts in return!
DUP needs you!
Thank you for your nod of approval. It's truly appreciated.
DUP needs you!
Thank you for your nod of approval. It's truly appreciated.
19th May 2023 3:12pm
21st May 2023 3:46pm
Good morning, sunshine!
I needed something less epic lengthed. Lol. Sometimes when I read my material after its posted awhile, I get mentally winded. So I realize it's a task for other readers perhaps.
Maybe I can restrain myself a bit, from making novellas every single time!
Thank you for the note of confidence. I purposely broke/skipped the rhyming to make it two into one write.
I needed something less epic lengthed. Lol. Sometimes when I read my material after its posted awhile, I get mentally winded. So I realize it's a task for other readers perhaps.
Maybe I can restrain myself a bit, from making novellas every single time!
Thank you for the note of confidence. I purposely broke/skipped the rhyming to make it two into one write.
20th May 2023 5:58am
Dear S,
Visceral reactions to this one. I wore a shirt of his once, now I’m wondering if he reacted the same as in this write? Would I have left a lingering thought? Did he regret my departure? Some things are never meant to know I guess. These are the writers of legend. The ones that stay with you long after reading. Awesome piece.
H🌷
Visceral reactions to this one. I wore a shirt of his once, now I’m wondering if he reacted the same as in this write? Would I have left a lingering thought? Did he regret my departure? Some things are never meant to know I guess. These are the writers of legend. The ones that stay with you long after reading. Awesome piece.
H🌷
21st May 2023 3:56pm
Something about a woman wearing a man's white button up shirt... slays me! It makes it all seem more intimate to me. Or something.
Sometimes we get a little shy about saying what we feel, at the time. But then we spill our guts out in creative writing. Right? Maybe he drove away from you, with regret cursing him out in the car.
Sometimes we get a little shy about saying what we feel, at the time. But then we spill our guts out in creative writing. Right? Maybe he drove away from you, with regret cursing him out in the car.
20th May 2023 1:46pm
Oh, yes... I echo H's thoughts above, as I've also been there... and I can remember how that shirt felt, so much so that I've even written about it...
It doesn't matter whether you write brief or long. Either way, you pack it with longing and emotion. Love it.
❤️k
It doesn't matter whether you write brief or long. Either way, you pack it with longing and emotion. Love it.
❤️k
21st May 2023 4:01pm
Thank you, k.
Some writes aren't make out sessions. Sometimes a quick peck on the cheek will do! I tend to forget that. Lol.
Not all women feel comfy wearing lingerie. But all women look great when rocking a button down!
Some writes aren't make out sessions. Sometimes a quick peck on the cheek will do! I tend to forget that. Lol.
Not all women feel comfy wearing lingerie. But all women look great when rocking a button down!
20th May 2023 10:25pm
I got the sense of a rising and falling of emotional crescendos about it, shadows of memories, the violent beauty of moments and the wake of shadows in remembrance. Your writing has terrific sense of intimate revelation, thoughtful and proportional in execution.
21st May 2023 4:05pm
Damn, thanks! My shoulders aren't broad enough to carry too much compliment! But I ain't sending it back to you! Lol. This write was all about a quick impact. Hopefully accomplished that.
21st May 2023 1:20pm
21st May 2023 4:06pm
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25th May 2023 2:26am
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25th May 2023 2:35am
Much appreciated, Cathedral.
I obviously try to mix up my material somewhat. But going forward, I'm thinking I need to shorten up most, if not all, as well. I sense a lag in some of them. That's not good!
At any rate, I'm still trying to make them worth reading. I appreciate the nod, immensely.
I obviously try to mix up my material somewhat. But going forward, I'm thinking I need to shorten up most, if not all, as well. I sense a lag in some of them. That's not good!
At any rate, I'm still trying to make them worth reading. I appreciate the nod, immensely.
