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Solemn chains
Shed his tusk
We’re raging deep
Break through the crust
Where are my sheep?
Follow the law
Best how it’s written
Tender hare
Oh how were smitten
Warp the soul
Come play their game
The lies they’ve sold
No walk through shame
Lone wolf hone
Those lasting few
Hold up your sleeve
I’m coming through
The poison seeps
Up through my veins
Marked for death
In solemn chains
We’re raging deep
Break through the crust
Where are my sheep?
Follow the law
Best how it’s written
Tender hare
Oh how were smitten
Warp the soul
Come play their game
The lies they’ve sold
No walk through shame
Lone wolf hone
Those lasting few
Hold up your sleeve
I’m coming through
The poison seeps
Up through my veins
Marked for death
In solemn chains
Published 8th May 2023
| Edited 30th Oct 2024
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8th May 2023 11:20pm
Very nice form here, literally. You carry the rhyme scheme rather well. I like the format - very concise, clear, clean. Articulated, practical sense of what it's like to observe the injustices of humanity. Thanks for sharing.
8th May 2023 11:48pm
You give good feedback. I appreciate that. For years, I wrote strictly in rhyme so I’ve had a lot of practice. Trick is to read it out loud. It has to flow off the tongue in a certain way for sure. Thanks again for reading.
