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Good As Gold
What's good;
The contours of your face,
curving into the palm of my hand.
How my hands have never been so steady.
How your hands, fanned out,
taking my body into them.
How your eyes; The comfort
of a dusky jungle in Autumn.
As a resting lioness, sated,
but never powerless.
Those eyes that welcome me,
into your wild.
How your voice; That whispered rasp,
lulling me inside you.
Undressing the cautions from me.
Guiding me towards bravery.
How, after our naked rapture, we lay,
letting the surrender of one another
concede into our skin.
How our hands, raised above us,
our palms clasped together
with each other's, like a clam.
Yet our fingers tease the other's.
Playful opposition,
prolonging the final surety.
Until we enclose them,
into our complete embrace.
How your breathing, softening.
Your chest pressing its answered pleadings
along my side.
All those silent thank-you's of ours,
being traded one to the other.
How that wisdom comes,
from finally being acknowledged.
And all the answers fall like coins,
as we toss them to one another.
Offering; You can spend first.
How you assure me,
that our shared calm after chaos is sacred.
That it can rest, protected,
within the gloss of our locking ribs.
When we sweated away all doubts.
When we then covered ourselves,
with such affection.
How that fire within me
has found it's hearth.
How you lamented, before, over your thorns.
Yet, they were but rungs, for me to climb.
To reach you, at your brightest.
Now I see you, above all things.
How the sun, now, is your medallion.
How I once again believe in God,
because I know his thoughts, of
how you were one of his new goals,
when he flooded the earth
and said let's try this again.
What's good, is how we blend our strengths.
No stress of day, or fears of night
has a chance to fester.
When you remove my shirt from me,
telling me, to wear you like armor.
So I do. And now I know,
how it feels to be wrapped in gold.
How rich I feel, when you kiss me.
How with each, you donate your breath
to the charity within my chest.
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Published 24th Mar 2023
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24th Mar 2023 00:30am
Styx!
Oh. My. Goodness!
This is so very beautiful. So much love & contentment woven throughout. Wonderful details.
I have a lot of favourite lines, but these ones:
"How you lamented, before, over your thorns.
Yet, they were but rungs, for me to climb.
To reach you, at your brightest."
Just, wow.... all I can say is, I sure hope so.
You never disappoint.
❤️k
Oh. My. Goodness!
This is so very beautiful. So much love & contentment woven throughout. Wonderful details.
I have a lot of favourite lines, but these ones:
"How you lamented, before, over your thorns.
Yet, they were but rungs, for me to climb.
To reach you, at your brightest."
Just, wow.... all I can say is, I sure hope so.
You never disappoint.
❤️k
24th Mar 2023 1:01am
Shhhh! Don't tell anyone, Mark tried to write an actual love poem!
It was time. I was due.
Thanks BT. I do try to not disappoint.
It was time. I was due.
Thanks BT. I do try to not disappoint.
24th Mar 2023 1:04am
Holy fuck! That was incredible! I echo k. Like… but that ass!
The ending.
Omg!
“How with each, you donate your breath
to the charity within my chest.”
The entire thing was delicate, romantic, and vulnerable. But the end was helium. It absolutely floated.
Beautiful write.
24th Mar 2023 1:26am
Hello Betty!
This write started with the ending in my head, and I basically wrote up from there.
I desperately tried to build enough, to earn that ending.
Your comment gives me the "whew!" I need. Helium? That's cool!
So thank you super much.
This write started with the ending in my head, and I basically wrote up from there.
I desperately tried to build enough, to earn that ending.
Your comment gives me the "whew!" I need. Helium? That's cool!
So thank you super much.
24th Mar 2023 1:52am
The intimacy is in the details, the haptics. Beautifully struck once again. Your someone I always look forward to reading.
24th Mar 2023 2:28am
Hey Daniel.
Thank you so much. I was noticing a pattern to my latest writes, and I decided to raise my spirits, I guess you could say?
I've been getting fueled a lot lately, so this one needed to acknowledge that. Sort of a thank you.
I appreciate your comment a lot.
Thank you so much. I was noticing a pattern to my latest writes, and I decided to raise my spirits, I guess you could say?
I've been getting fueled a lot lately, so this one needed to acknowledge that. Sort of a thank you.
I appreciate your comment a lot.
24th Mar 2023 3:10pm
Your writing is consistently soulful and meaningful to me, so thank you.
24th Mar 2023 2:10am
Home Run
Bases loaded
Grand Slam of Poetry
Deep over the center field fence
4 bagger love poem award
No pine tar needed
Direct flesh burn
BIG LIKE
Bases loaded
Grand Slam of Poetry
Deep over the center field fence
4 bagger love poem award
No pine tar needed
Direct flesh burn
BIG LIKE
24th Mar 2023 2:34am
Well thank you! I didnt even have to flash my bat !
I actually LMAO at your comment, PS. Thanks! I needed that!
I'm so proud now, I'm wearing my cleats to bed. Lol
I actually LMAO at your comment, PS. Thanks! I needed that!
I'm so proud now, I'm wearing my cleats to bed. Lol
Anonymous
24th Mar 2023 2:38am
Whoa!!!!!! Look at you trying to snag my Hallmark job!!! This is fantastic! 😊
24th Mar 2023 8:39am
I can always rely om you to lift my reading spirits mate. In our machismo world of ego and fake bravado, it's really unique to encounter a tender and vulnerable male scripture. This swoons from the page. Many could learn from this sensitive stance. I like how you mention you started at the end (so to speak). Always interesting to read of the creative process. Really good stuff. Rob
25th Mar 2023 2:13pm
Thank you, Rob.
I had a lot of chaotic years as a kid. I had a lot of chaotic years in the Army. I had a lot of chaotic years in a biker club. Too. Much. Chaos.
Someone that read this write said that it seems "feminine". Maybe it does. It's still okay.
I am an extremely strong person mentally. And I like strong minded women. They are my partner, after all. If I have a chaotic day, what's better than a woman who can stand with me. Because I will be that for them, unwavering.
A good man remembers to be a good person first. Same as women.
I had a lot of chaotic years as a kid. I had a lot of chaotic years in the Army. I had a lot of chaotic years in a biker club. Too. Much. Chaos.
Someone that read this write said that it seems "feminine". Maybe it does. It's still okay.
I am an extremely strong person mentally. And I like strong minded women. They are my partner, after all. If I have a chaotic day, what's better than a woman who can stand with me. Because I will be that for them, unwavering.
A good man remembers to be a good person first. Same as women.
Anonymous
24th Mar 2023 9:29am
Sublime intimacy on a level like none other
Much respect
Naaj
Much respect
Naaj
25th Mar 2023 2:15pm
Anonymous
24th Mar 2023 9:52pm
Lion eyes. It was the only phrase I got in my head on reading this. Consider it my review.
25th Mar 2023 2:17pm
1st Apr 2023 9:49pm
For lack of a better comment this whole piece is golden!!
Loved it to pieces. All of it.
Especially the clam hands!!! hahaha
My favorite cause it casted such a visual for me.
They do resemble clams when holding in certain ways - where
the fingers interlock. And I'm rambling!!
Totally awesome you!!!
Loved it to pieces. All of it.
Especially the clam hands!!! hahaha
My favorite cause it casted such a visual for me.
They do resemble clams when holding in certain ways - where
the fingers interlock. And I'm rambling!!
Totally awesome you!!!
2nd Apr 2023 2:31pm
Well look who showed up! I feel like I should shower you with frosted flakes!
Thanks lil mama. Good to see your flowery presence!
Thanks lil mama. Good to see your flowery presence!
