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On the bed
Sensual dreams
lips still dry
pillow tucked between legs
lips still dry
pillow tucked between legs
Published 20th Mar 2023
Author's Note
horny dreams and all alone on the bed, very difficult to explain myself. Ha ha ha
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- Edited 8th Jul 2023 7:45pm
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This was a fireball of poetry. Dynamite comes in small packages and this is incendiary.
Xo
John
Xo
John
20th Mar 2023 5:20pm
Nope 😸
Not at all
I'm not enjoying by myself
It's just my thought
I'm in searching of my man to stay in his arms n to fulfill all my dirty fantasies 😀
Not at all
I'm not enjoying by myself
It's just my thought
I'm in searching of my man to stay in his arms n to fulfill all my dirty fantasies 😀
21st Mar 2023 1:28am
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21st Mar 2023 4:27am
I love this sensual marriage of potency and minimalism. Haikus are portals for me. They always take me somewhere.
"Lips still dry" could have two meanings in the present context, which adds way more to the poem. Keep writing. Keep dreaming. :))
"Lips still dry" could have two meanings in the present context, which adds way more to the poem. Keep writing. Keep dreaming. :))
21st Mar 2023 5:40pm
23rd Mar 2023 12:08pm
This haiku captures a sense of sensuality and longing while hinting at loneliness or unfulfillment. The image of "sensual dreams" suggests a dream world filled with pleasure and desire, but the fact that the "lips [are] still dry" implies a sense of disappointment or unfulfilled yearning upon waking.
The line "pillow tucked between legs" adds to the sensual and intimate quality of the poem, suggesting a physical position that might be associated with sexual pleasure or self-comfort. However, the fact that the pillow is between the legs rather than in the arms of a partner could also be interpreted as a sign of loneliness or solitude.
A complex emotion is described in the space of three lines. Good job.
The line "pillow tucked between legs" adds to the sensual and intimate quality of the poem, suggesting a physical position that might be associated with sexual pleasure or self-comfort. However, the fact that the pillow is between the legs rather than in the arms of a partner could also be interpreted as a sign of loneliness or solitude.
A complex emotion is described in the space of three lines. Good job.
23rd Mar 2023 12:32pm
Many thanks for dropping by and to abbreviate my feelings. N Thank you for adding in your RL. Much Love 💛
